I stood there quietly waiting for him to come outside of his house.I had been waiting for him now for about 2 hours but I wasn't about to leave for I had been planning this for months. There couldn't be any slip-ups on my part. I seen the light come on about 20 minutes later,hopeing it was him. Sure enough I seen the prick come outside,lighting up a cigarette or maybe it was his infamous marijuana. I couldn't tell from this distance. Silently I crept closer,making sure to not make a sound. As I got closer I realized that it was marijuana. That would be an advantage for me and I was happy that he had never changed,at least in that part. 1
I was only itches from him now,it was now or never. Without warning I crept up behind him,grabbing him,choking him until he passed out. I dragged him in my van and tied him up,just in case he woke up. I drove to my out of town property. It was a little country house about 20 minutes out of town. I brought him inside and tied him to my table. 2
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I was sooo happy when frank told me that he had gotten some more weed. I hadn't smoked now for about three days. God this was some good shit some of that,some georgia pine. I needed to go outside otherwise I would have to share with everyone else. I started to walk out the door but had to turn around to turn the light on. The night time always scared me. I had gotten a good half a joint in when some bitch jumped out on me and was trying to choke me. Last thing I knew everything was black.4
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At last he woke up,with that frightened look on his face. My plan was about to unfold. I just hoped I wouldn't lose my medical lisence. I began to get my equiptment ready. For all of you that don't know what I am going to do I will tell you. I am going to castrate him. I don't want him to have any more kids that he won't take care of. See he had gotten me pregnant after abusing me. He would hit me tell me I was worthless and just treat me like crap. I finally got the courage to leave him after becoming pregnant. He then decided since I was no longer with him that he was going to denying my son. He had gotten another women pregnant and had done the same with her so I was going to make sure he was not going to have kids again.6
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I awoke to see karen standing over me. I already knew what she was going to do she was not going to be pretty. I had denyed fathering her son and she accused me of hitting her or whatever. They were accidents, I never ment to hit her she just got me so mad. After awhile I just started to feel better after I made her feel like shit. I felt empowered,strong,and at ease.8
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I put him under again so I could do this and he wouldnt really know what had happened. I began to start snipping away. All my hatred starting to wash away. I felt great knowing he woulnd't father another child that he was not going to take care of. I finished in about 20 mintues and then left. I kept an eye on him though to make sure he would wake up.Once he did I got into my van and drove away. I went home just in time to send my son off to school.
Author notes
part of its true....the stuff that the guy did is a true part but the castrating and everything else is completely false.
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Comments
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Go girl! Castrate that mother
er! Sounds painful, though. I loved how you made it both point of views. Interesting story.
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It's a great story. But some parts weren't detailed enough, but it was great. Lol scary too.


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This was very interesting to read. It was very nicely protrayed. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck toyou in the contest.
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A good story in keeping what I was asking for in the contest.
It does need a bit of editing but other than that I like the creativity of the story and the challenge that you took in writing it.
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.

beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.



