Nick Denbow.1
I hadn't heard that name in what seemed like ages. Until 5 minutes ago, that is.2
Just sitting on my computer looking at my deadjournal, thinking of ways to improve it and such and the phone rings. Tristan answers it.3
That's almost a given, I never answer the phone.4
After talking on the phone for a good, long while, he waltzed into my room and said:5
"Nick wants to talk to you."6
"Nick?"7
"Denbow."8
Whoa. I thought. He had moved back to Kentucky right after I dumped him. I hadn't really heard from him since. I was 11 then and he was 15. I always had a thing for older guys.9
"Well, tell him I'm busy."10
Tristan smirked. "Yeah...busy, I'm sure."11
Tristan knew I wasn't busy, but I didn't care. I would not be talking to Nick...Not now. Not ever.12
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ooooo..what suspense this ends on! I want to know more about this Nick guy, why you really didn't want to speak to him, is there unfinished business there? why did you dump him?
lol...always the nosy one me.
Blue
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hmm older guys???what about micheal? lol interesting...those phone calls are weird...i just scream at them to go away
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Now this is a good start for a great story. Interesting characters. The pov is good so far. And you have caught my interest. Not too long and drawn out. I happen to like it that way...keeps me interested if the writer doesn't try to fit a whole chapter on this tiny screen. I leave with crossed eyes and a headache after trying to figure out where all the paragraphs are and who is what and where...lol...sorry, rambling on. I really did enjoy this..keep it up.
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Whoa. I've had that before. It really creeps me out to know that someone you used to date had moved away, then called you again ... to talk to you! Good thinking on your part, for turning down the phone. And right now, he should be about nineteen, and you're only fifteen, so any relationship there could be considered as statuatory rape. If you were ever to get that far. Anyhow, you don't want to talk to him, and you won't ever. Good thing. Besides, you've got (P) to worry about. No need for Nick. Heh.. Alliteration.
OPIUM
P.S. A story? I would've thought of this as more of a .. herm .. column? -
OMG girl what is up with that!!! I can't believe he called! Was he still in Kentucky or was he here in ohio? OMG i remember that kid he is sooo weird ok gurl i g2g ttyl
Gem
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