My Personal Forest

I opened my eyes and saw a huge world inside myself. It was made of light of hope and dust of dreams. 1

My sanctuary.2

My personal forest, I believe.3

It was inside a chest that was finally open, showing smells and colors I had never experienced before, filling by soul... making me levitate. 4

I flew.5

I felt warm as my body filled with divine, universe energy.6

And that's when a note came to me, made from frayed pages of an old book, brought by the wind right to my hand:7

"Breathe the air...
taste the water that comes from the skies...8

Feel the wind...
feel the water under your feet
feel the light on your eyes
and hide in the dark...9

Taste the fruit... so pure
dance feeling the grass under your feet...
sleep calm and pure.10

Watch the sunset, the twilight,
feel the moon raising into the skies,
taste the snow...
feel the sand...
come and be."11

So unexpected as this was, I finally touched the wet grass with my naked feet, and moved softly my naked body, releasing the note opening my hand slowly, delivering it back to the wind.12

This was my new world.13

The skies where clean and vast, showing beautiful colors as the rays of an invisible sun touched them. I was able to see a different universe just watching the clouds, their forms and colors.14

I was amazed... and I felt peaceful.15

I walked across my green forests, dancing and singing old songs, songs sang once by Celts and later by the Atlantes, mixing with the magic of that place. This was my place of hope; a place to find myself.16

I swam into the deep, crystalline lakes, rivers and oceans, feeling the cool water refresh my body. My wounds were now healed.17

I felt the wind against my face as I closed my eyes, and enjoyed the sound of the leaves moving in harmony with the breeze. I discovered truths.18

And then, just then I tasted the flavor of the juicy fruit from the trees. I felt full again, and I knew I was allowed to stay in this place forever...19

Forever... because this place was inside myself...20

I breathed a clean air, and every night I walked at the shore. My thoughts were around the breeze, the waves, that made noise when they crashed against the sand. All that sounded like a melody inside my head, a melody that was slowly consuming me and making me feel one with everything around me. 21

I watched the moon and felt it's power.22

I watched the stars and saw their immensity. 23

And every morning I slept between soft leaves, letting the first rays of the day caress my white skin.24

In this place I was strong... and it took a long time for me to notice. 25

This is my sanctuary now and forever, my personal forest. 26

Author notes

OPTION:

♦ Write about finally giving in (to an emotion)

This descibes a place inside myself where I find peace and hope. It's hard when you feel trapped inside something wrong that happened to you, but it's great when you notice you decide how you feel. It's hard and still hurts, but there's always a force that keeps you up, you only need to find it.

It also describes a new world, a world inside ourselves, so it can also be:

♦ Build a new world. Describe it to me in detail. What kind of beings live on it? What is the atmosphere like and the weather? And so on.

This was a weird story to write because I also found inspiration in this picture:

http://media.photobucket.com/image/nature/fairydancer464/Nature/storm.jpg?o=11

So... I used a lot of promts, but I could have only used one, it depends on the point of view.

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  • E Ardania
    November 19
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    A delightfully refreshing and relaxing read - you had me wishing I was in the new world. *sigh*

    Your descriptions were very vivid, very powerful; you had me immersed totally. There's nothing for me to poke and prod at, except for 'flied' in line 5. Only slightly confused there... don't know if you meant 'flew' or something else.

    Nevertheless, it's a fabulous piece of writing! Thanks for entering and best of luck!


  • Stars-are-Blind93
    November 16
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    I completely liked this!
    it was really worth it a read! it made me feel very calm and relaxed... you created a very nice and elegant setting.... the overall effect was really soothing! even the background colour contributed!

    thanks for entering and Good Luck!!


  • Mistress Cheetah
    November 14
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    ^^ not really a clifhanger but it'll do.

  • Marta gold member
    November 10
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    Worth the second read, I would change the background because it doesn't seem to fit with the lovely words...maybe, make it a color background...a nice blue or green. A good piece of writing...smopoth and elegant and calming/soothing.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


    • Maxxym Neovalerious
      November 10
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      Thanks a lot again! Your words are well appreciated.

      I had a problem with the background as I didn't really know what background to use, I will consider your idea, thank you very much.


  • MidnightEclipse gold member
    November 7
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    p8; "Breath the air..." Breathe

    I really liked it.


  • chinmay
    October 30

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    A well crafted fantasy.

    A very personal one at that. Great imagery and making one long for the blissful experience. Well done and all the best.


  • ForTheLoveOfBooks silver member
    October 29
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    I like the world you created! I would love to visit lol
    Very descriptive with wonderful metaphors! I enjoyed reading this piece, normally when I like something I will give the author my favorite line they wrote but I can't choose.. I really like the way you write. You have a beautiful way with words.
    Thank you for entering the contest and Good luck!

  • Lodkod
    October 29

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    GOood Job on this piece

    This was great it seemed so peacefull if only I could escape the difulcultys of the world like that and one day I will when I day and go to heaven with Jesus Christ!!!!!! I can't wait but I cna lol great work!!!

  • Marta gold member
    October 29
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    I like this piece, it was short and sweet. I like your world.

    Well done, with such few words. I am giving you the clappy hands here 'cause I don't think I have enough points.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    October 29

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    I think you did a fantastic job with the prompts
    I like the descriptions and emotions you present the reader in the piece... It was an enjoyable and engaging read and I liked this Reminds me so much of daydreaming, which I find myself doing too often sometimes
    Great work! Thank you for entering and for being a part of the group

    Pixie


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 29

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    This was a really interesting piece. It was very enjoyable to read. It was well done. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • DewDrop
    October 29

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    I really like this. I often daydream about a place to call my own, a place that is mine where time does not excist lol. But really you did a wonderful job on this. Great detail too, keep up the good work.

    Dew

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