My feet hit the pavement in fast intervolves, my breath coming out in huge white puffs, my intake and outtake of air strained. I hated the cold, and running in it didn’t hit my top ten fun-things-to-do-while-freezing-you-ass-off list either. I guess being five feet seven inches tall with maybe only half of that covered with clothing, thin clothing at that, in minus twenty degrees cellules didn’t help. But that shadow looming behind me kept me going, no way was I getting caught now.1
I cursed my flowing purple skirt and tight purple tube top, the air nipping dangerously at my skin. I was going to catch ammonia. I took a sharp left, running into heavy people traffic, all of them snug in warm furry coats and boots. I wish I had thought of that, before I was chased out of my apartment, in the middle of winter, with barely anything on.2
These people had been watching me for at least two weeks, maybe longer. With this cold coming in I didn’t do much exploring, just stayed inside my nice, warm, heated apartment; away from the snowy abyss. A slipper fell off my foot, but I didn’t stop to put it back on, stopping would be bad, very bad. So fucking cold! I shivered at the loose of my shoe, but still I kept on.3
I ran through the crowed, not really knowing which way to go. So I continued down the street, taking a side road I recognized. That’s when I noticed no one was following me; I knew I was in deep trouble now. The figure standing in front of me proved that, a second one came and cut me off from the way I just came. I cursed fairly violently under my breath, getting ready for a fight.4
The closed in around me, smirks plastered on there shadowed faces. 5
“Come now girl, don’t make this harder on your self.”6
The man on my right chuckled in a deep burly voice. It sent shivers of fear down my spine. Not working to well on calming me down there eh buddy?7
“We aren’t going to hurt you, we just want to talk.”8
Do they really think I am that stupid? My snorting gave away my distrust, and set things into motion. They both lunged at me, I threw myself backwards, and into something soft. I hadn’t check to see if anyone was behind me, and there way. The person wrapped their arms around me, turning and pinning me against the wall, hands above my head. 9
“Now, let’s be civilized.”10
“Arron Grunder.” I sneered, struggling against his grip.11
He chuckled, leaning his lips close to my ears. His grip tightening on my wrists, causing me to wince. 12
“We have pictures my dear.”13
I froze, my eyes going wide in shock. He had pictures? Oh fuck I am screwed.14
“What pictures are you talking about?”15
Did I mention I was a smart asses, beat around the bush type of girl? I guess I didn’t mention that.16
“These pictures.”17
He tossed them in my face, I could only catch glimpses of them but I knew what they were. They were of me and Michael Grunder, Arron Grunder’s son. We had a thing; ok it was more than a thing. But you see, Mr. Grunder doesn’t like little poor girls who just get by on paying, well, everything. So Michael and I kept it on the down low, or so we thought. 18
And someone had taken pictures of us while we were making love, deep sensual I’m ready to get married, love. In fact, Michael and me were talking about it, we were both nineteen and wanted out of his fathers clutches. There was another problem with that, it was Mr. Grunder’s obsession to make sure Michaels life was a living hell, to mould it in a way HE saw fit for him to live it. That put a stopper to most of our plans.19
But this time we swore we had it right, we would meet places he wouldn’t be caught dead. I guess his spy would, because there were the pictures.20
“Now, its not that you aren’t cute hunny, but I’m going to ask you to stay away from my son, and I am only going to ask once.”21
“What happens if I don’t?”22
“You’ll have an, unfortunate accident; you know how these things are.”23
Isn’t he just charming? I wonder how someone as wonderful as Michael could have come from this hell spawn.24
“Now, let’s not make this any more traumatic for my son and obey.”25
“Bow wow.”26
The back of his hand connected with my cheek with such force that the back of my head connected with the brick wall behind me. I gasped and coughed, as Mr. Grunder dropped me. 27
“Be smart girl, not smart assed.”28
With that he disappeared from the ally, leaving me clinging to conciseness with a splitting migraine. What did you get your self into this time Savanna? 29
Author notes
This was a story starter I had tucked away, hoping to find something to work with it, and I did. So, here it is, hope it works XD.
In a list
A contest entry
- Give me a story to go with the title. by DewDrop.
350 points, ended November 20, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Do you think I should contiune this stoyr, or leave it as a short?
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Could be the start of a good story. Held my interst and made me want to know more about Savanna, the Grunders, and the people who work for Mr. Grunder.
You really should work on spelling and grammar, because in places this story is really hard to read. There are three words, and they're not the same, and it is important to know their correct usage. There, their, they're. "There" is like "here and there." It is a place, though not always a geographical place. If you're not sure, replace "there" with "here." If the sentence still makes sense, "there" is the correct word. "Their" means the thing or things that belong to "them," as in "their cats." They're is a contraction of "they are." A writer's gotta learn these things.
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I knew about therse...but I have only been focusing on Blood ^ Magick...writting it for NanNoWriMo...then I have to edit it...I will fix my other stuff later...
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cool. that was interesting. i like the girl she a cute sassy girl.continue writing!!
beginning: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, characters: 4.
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CONTINUE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT IS A AWESOME STORY!!!!!
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awh please continue!! i wanna know what happens!!!
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Leave it short. I'm familiar with your work and I think this could be a clunker lolz.
Anywho, interesting.
The reason why I want you to not continue is because the reader will already know what's going to happen so... not very helpful when trying to create something new and suspenseful.
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This was wonderful excelent job. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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I love
I entered the contest too but i think you should win!!! Please continue
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o.o tyvm
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Continue this! You got me hook and I want to read more! I want to know what happens lol! MORE MORE MORE! ^w^
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Do you think it fits what Dew asked for o.o
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I checked out the contest and I must say I think it's perfect for it. But it says that there should be some kind of sexual stuff in it right? You should add something like the father is sexually touching or maybe just little comments on how she looks in her outfit. But that may be just me. ^w^ Hope I helped!!
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I tried to do that with the pictures XD eh v.v..I didn't want to sex up this part, that would come later, but I did hint at it she didn't say it had to be a main focus so I did that instead >.<
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