Revenge

High school always seemed like the greatest place to be when your in Jr. high. All the cool new things you get to see. All the parties you can go to, all the new cliques you can try to join. 1

In reality High school isn't as non-descriptive as I make it sound. It's worse, it's in color. The greatest place to be ... yeah right. More like Hell! Parties, there where alot, all we did was get trashed and barf all over ourselves, not fun. And for the cliques, there just people with sad miserable life's who get great joy out of other peoples defaults. 2

High school isn't fun or big and grand, when you experience high school you'll see what i'm talking about. That's not the end of the story O no. It's just the beginning.3

You see, it was my freshmen year, I won't tell you where, all you need to know is that I was expecting it to be the greatest of all. But no one really ever tells you anything. Freshmen are scum, no matter how you look at it, it's what we are.4

First day of school and I was already branded the biggest loser in the hole world, at least in this world. It seem that the only way to be popular was to have nice curves and well everything else was just money sticking out of your shirt and your behind. And trust me I had neither all three. 5

Entering the school was a disaster, looks here and there. Smirks, glares, and shoves. It was nothing new to me, Jr. high wasn't pleasant. The first thing I didn't want to do I did, it wasn't intentionally I have always been a clout's. So when my chocolate milk dropped on the ground splashing all over the most popular person in the school, it wasn't a surprise ... for me at least.6


I'm sorry was all I could allow to leave my already chewed lips. She looked down at me as if I was her meal, or even better her prey. It gave me goosebumps, even know it burns in my memory. She carefully, so swiftly held on to my wrist and lifted me to stand on my feet. For that second I believed us to be the only ones in the entrance of the school. But as reality sat in, I could see everyone standing around, looking at me the same way she was. 7

You know when people get nerves, they have this kind of wired thing they do without know, yeah I have one of those ... things. I happen to revolt everything I had eaten all over her. I'm dead, right? 8

When I woke up from my vomiting faint, I was in the trainers office. He was sitting at his desk looking at some papers grinning at himself. I didn't want to look like a venerable freshmen so I left. I don't think he even knew I was there. 9

I went to all my classes with no sign of Kathrine the captain of the girls Basketball team. I was just as surprised that she wasn't a cheerleader. Lunch was nothing new, no one said anything and or looked at me. This morning was all but forgotten after lunch was over, until 8th period . After school, she approached me with a wide grin. Pulling her long hair out of her face in the parking lot, she handed me an invite. Opening it all i could do was stare. I had  thrown up on her, my milk was all over her, was this a prank? Is all I could think, but in her face she showed no sign of anger, nothing but happiness. 10

She didn't say much, just that I must go. That would be my redemption. Getting home, I grabbed the best dress I had and the best heels my mother had and was ready to go. I walked all the way to her house with a cheesy grin on my face. I stepped onto the porch realizing the lights where off, at a party the lights are always off right? I thought.
I knocked, no answer
Again, the creek of the door.
A hand gripped my wrist, I knew it was her from how hard my wrist was pulsating the first time she held on to my hands. The room was pitch dark, no sound but my breath heavy with fear. My forehead beaded with sweat, I crawled for a minute looking for the door. Then a laugh and a kick to the left side of my rib. I clenched on to my side crying in pain. Then another hit to the left sighed of my head. There where stars in my vision, and heat dripping from it. I was to scared to feel it so I didn't. 11

I managed to get to my feet with no more blows. I ran blind hitting on to a glass door, I felt around it clenching onto the handle. I pulled the door open not even looking to closing it. The sky was lighten' by the moon making it a little easier to see. Running hard I trip over an object on the grass. My face was the first to feel the impact, this time the heat moved to my cheek and my nose. I rolled on to my back and sat up trying to stand up. 12

Then there was laughter from behind me, " Little girl wants to go down the whale!" Over and over they repeated, for some reason I knew there were only  two even though it sounded like a big group. I stood fast causing me to see the stars once again. I staggered trying to get to the fence, there was a sound to my right and left. Footsteps, closer they got I froze. They grabbed a hold of me and pushed me against a rocky surface. 13

I was frozen only to begin to cry, then the adrenaline started to pump its way through my body. I pushed and scratched, they held on tighter. I sung my body to the ground bringing them with me. They stood with great speed, I didn't get the chance to bet them. I was hit on the head again with greater force. I screamed with the over heated pain. Not knowing what to do at that point, the best that came to mind was, I f I go down so do you. I pushed myself to the edge of the rocky surface, and pulled down.14

The next couple hours where spent in the darkness awake, I climbed out of the whale. Dress ripped and dried blood every where, no shoes. I crawled into a ball sobbing. The police came in the morning, I was accused of murdering the two girls. Then they concluded that I was unstable and was sent here. I'm not unstable, I just know the truth. At night I still see there blooded bodies at the bottom of the whale, and laugh. So much for revenge, I was the last one standing!

Author notes

This was a school project thing, I had to write a horror story and well yeah. It was due already and It was done in a rush, so go ahead and critique it strongly! Hope you guys like it, also It'sm my Halloween story. I haven't written in a long time so here is what came to mind forced to write at a critical time.

 

 

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  • Toxic Valentine
    October 28

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    A few mistakes. Like "O no" should be "Oh no" And "hole school" should be "Whole school" and "Know" should be "now"

    What an evil person. There's no use crying over spilled milk. This girl was completely bonkers! All that anger over chocolate milk! This was quite an interesting read Just go over your work and fix the minor mistakes. I'm a tad confused about the whale. It was surprising that she laughed at the thought of the people she had killed. But that makes it more interesting Great work


  • Tiger-Lily
    October 28

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    Very different ending to the one I was expecting. o__o The last few lines kinda made the protagonist sou nd psycho as opposed to someone who was wanting revenge and self-defense.XD

    This was an interesting portrayal to high school. I'm glad I never ran into any girls that mean. o__o

    I'd suggest running a onceover. Spell-check won't pick up typos because the mistakes aren't typos. Stuff like "know" should have been "now", etc. Other than that, you're pretty good.

    Very interesting write.

    ♥ HT


    • Host
      October 28
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      thank you, I'll take a look at that.