I walked into school to see Rayna looking at me, her eyes puffy and red but that fiery look in them was what made her different from the others. She just turned from my gaze and I sighed. Slowly walking over to her, I turned her to face me. Shock in her eyes. "Look, I know what I did was wrong. And I came to tell you I'm sorry. I thought it was fun to break hearts but breaking yours was a bad idea. I mean breaking others is fun but yours, well let's just say that I came to my senses and wanted to say sorry." I blurted out.1
Her eyes narrowed and her hands went to her hips. She was going to make me regret even apologizing to her isn't she? I sighed again. "No amount of 'I'm sorry' is going to make me feel better Jack. Your a prick and their is nothing else to say." She snapped. I wanted to snap right back but took a deep breath. 2
"I know. That's why I want you to hurt me. Hurt me in anyway you want. Any kind of payback. You can do as many as you want or you can just hate me forever. That's fine too. I just want to try to make it better." I whispered. Hating what I was saying.3
Shock formed in her eyes, an evil smile spread across her lips finally and I chewed on my lower lip in nervousness. Hoping death wasn't an option. But it could be a new look for me. Okay, I'm not that self centered.4
"Fine. Date me. I want to date you but you can't break up with me. Only I break up with you." She answered and now it was my turn to be the one shocked. 5
"Whoa what? I hurt you and you want to DATE me?" I snapped. She nodded. Knowing she had something planned for me. Instead of saying anything else, she put a paper with her number in my pocket and was off to class. Girls. I rolled my eyes. I turned around to see her sister and my eyes went wide. She smirked. 6
"Your going to have a hell raising time tonight on your date." She smiled and shoved past me. 7
"Wait the date is tonight?!" I called after her but she was already gone. Great date with death. Or maybe she's a she-devil. Can't tell just yet. This night is going to be long...
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this is heaaps goood
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your a very good writer..you should make this into a book
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this is very good waitin for chapter 6 i hope he pays big time
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6th is out now
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it's out now
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Good story line it looks like.
#1 her eyes puffy and red but that fiery look that made her different from the others.
Seems to be incomplete.
#1 others is fun but yours, well let's just say that I came to my sense and
Are fun? Senses?
#5 it was my time to be the one shocked
time or turn?
#6 She nodded. Knowing she had something planned for me. Instead of saying else, she put a
May be OK and just me, feels awkward.
#7 Your going to have (a?) hell raising time
#8 I called after (her?) but she was already
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 3.
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Thanks, I looked back and corrected them.
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