Dull grey.
Pulling himself from the clouds,
Poseiden is amazed at the new strength he has found.1
Startling yellow!
Coloring the dull grey,
As Zues aims at the ground.2
Enraged trees.
Raining anger could murder all of the human race,
Thinks, Hermes, as he flees.3
Bewildered waves!
Echo fades into the dusk,
As Narcissus dives into the depths to save the only thing he craves-himself.
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Beautifully cast! I can picture the storm in my mind even as I read your poem. Just one note of correction that you can fix with editing just two words: Poseidon was male; be aware, he was also the God of the sea.
Because you used Poseidon, though, I pictured this as more of a hurricane than just a thunderstorm. Well done! -
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Thanx lol. Yeah I meant to fix that, but I don't know how on this iPod touch, so it'll probably be awhile before I can edit it.
Thanks,
-becca<3
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This was wonderful, really painted a picture in my mind, you did a fantastic job with this, I had flases of a thumderstorm during the day.
Great job.
Dew
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