As I lay dieing1
I think about what was2
What is3
And what could’ve been4
The razor is still in my wrist5
I turn my head weakly to see6
The blood is forming a puddle on my pillow7
I feel pain8
Sweet, sweet pain9
I look at the pictures in frames on my dresser10
The best times I ever had11
Pictures of my family12
Downstairs unaware13
How selfish I am14
I look out the window15
The toddlers playing outside16
Laughing and frolicking17
So happy18
I hope they don’t end up like this19
I take a moment to think of my last regrets20
That I never had a kid21
That I was never important22
That they wont miss me23
And that he will24
I look at my diary25
Filled with all my thoughts26
Filled with all my pleads for help27
Abundant with my sorrows and regrets28
And with my past29
I see the picture of my brother graduating college30
Only wishing that I could’ve been there31
And I wonder if anyone will ever wish that too32
And if I would’ve made a difference to anyone in my future33
The future that I no longer have34
As I lay dieing35
As everything starts to fade36
As I go numb37
As it goes silent38
As I think of him39
Author notes
dont really care, this was just a description of a dream i had a while back..... no biggy
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
1 - 6 of 6
-
Beautiful; it really makes you think and I like that. Keep it up!
-
very good. I really liked this...a wonderful write about the regrets you had...
nice dream...hope this makes you realize what life means to you...
XoXO
NiKKi
<3
-
Wow this is really sad. Very great poem though, stunning emotion and well written. Great job
Aura
Rock on! -
uhh
i liked it but a little cufused i guess... -
Why it's coming up as a story confuses me...^_^
Very good...definitely emotional, and very sad. A few suggestions though...
In lines 1 and 35, "dieing" is actually spelled "dying"- common mistake. ^_^ Also, lines 13 and 14,
"Downstairs unaware,
How selfish I am"
would have worked as
"Downstairs unaware
of how selfish I am"
Just a few suggestions. Wonderful poem! Great job. ^_^ -
for this being a dream it was pretty darn good! i loved it! this poem i have ~a meeting in the street~ was a dream its weird how some we remember and others we don't! but hey just a thought~I liked this alot~keep up the great work!~MOONY~
Adding your comment:
1 - 6 of 6
