Life in fragments

Losing myself,1

I am falling,2

Slowly gathering the pieces that fell apart,3

I try to find what's left of me,4

But there's not enough left,5

You took from me,6

I fear I gave too much,7

Of myself away,8

I guess I live,9

To die a little more inside.10

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  • Rorshach gold member
    October 30

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    I think it should be 'losing' as opposed to loosing.
    It did have insight with the line about giving too much of yourself.That's what all relationships are about, and why they hurt so much when they end.


  • Paper.thin.paradox
    October 25

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    You took from me,
    I fear I gave too much,
    Of myself away,

    It seems to be a great feeling when you're doing the giving away, because you realize you can trust someone that much. But once they take if from you (and sometimes it's in a way they couldn't stop) then it hurts like fucking hell.

    Love it.
    Make it into stanzas.
    And maybe write a bit more.
    Great job.




    ~ Amy