O'Neill's Secret

I've killed hundreds of men in my life1

But I lay asleep at night 2

wondering3

Am I the reason4

he pulled the trigger5

and left me to raise my three grandchildren?

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  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    December 28, 2009

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    "lie" asleep? If you mean it to be present tense, that is.

    Lovely Postsecret and definitely what I was looking for. Short and heavy with guilt and emotion and a lot of images come to my mind from these few words. I like how you've formatted this and I adore how you've structured the sentences. It's an up-and-down of emotion.

    Thanks for entering Character PostSecrets and good luck.

    ♥ HT


  • Len Kage
    November 30, 2009
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    Much emotion lurks within this piece...
    It raises many a question as well...

    Good job! ^_^


  • jkingmaker gold member
    October 25, 2009
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    A very powerful short piece. Nicely done.