My love

Do you remember the summer of 06? I was barely 16. I left home for the first time searching for the time of my life. Foolishness and irresponsibility were my names at that time... And I found you. You laughed in my face,with that cocky loud laugh that I'll remember for the rest of my life and called me a kid,telling me I was "too young". How I wanted to punch you right in the face and than lock myself in a room with you for a week.1

You were so much more than the good time I was looking for, and so much more dangerous,but I closed my eyes and ignored the flashing red lights. I found myself in your arms,in a tent, listening to the sea much quicker than I could realize what happened. You smelled like the sea itself,and you tasted salty and sweet at the same time. Than you sang to me a song about a girl "as simple as an apple, as fresh as the sea?". You led me to believe I was that girl, but was I?2

I can't deny that the time I spent with you were the best 3 months of my life,but you aren't called "Ghost" for nothing. I left you on the beach singing on your guitar. I barely managed to get a "I'll call you" out of you. You never did.3

I found you on the same beach on the summer of 07, unchanged, like the time passed by you without leaving a mark. You looked at me with your eyes like the sea and laughed like you did the year before. "You're still a kid' you said, and I hated how much I wanted you.4

Needless to say I was yours that summer. I forgave you for not remembering me. I was too mesmerised by you to even realize that I was going to get hurt again, like I did the last summer.5

And the summer came to an end, this time you said you'd come over. You called once, but you never came.6

I haven't seen you in the summer of 08,but that doesn't mean that I haven't thought about you every day when the sun kissed my skin. I wished it was you.7

And then this summer...I found you on the same beach. I wasn't a kid anymore and you didn't laugh like you did before. You smiled and said I changed. Then I saw how much you've changed yourself. You were no longer the bohemian careless prince with the guitar on his lap, a bear in one hand and a cigarette in the other like I remembered. It was something in your eyes, in your voice that made me almost certain that you've missed me.8

And I forgave you again. We made love on the seaside, under the stars. I tasted your salty skin, and wished the summer never ended. Day by day I came to understand you more that you could have guessed.I don't blame you anymore. You fear that without the sea you are just an ordinary nobody, because for everyone that knows you,you are the sea itself. 9

This summer you said nothing, and I didn't force you to. You took my hand and looked into my eyes and I left.10

It's been two months and I haven't heard from you. I don't know where you are hiding,but I know you are thinking of me. I could be your summer in a winter day if only you wanted me to... 11

You won't come,but I know I'll allways find you by the sea,with the guitar on your lap and the moon shining on you...12


                                    Forever your girl as simple as an apple,                 13

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                                                          as fresh as the sea.15

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  • Nu-Speak silver member
    November 24
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    An Alternative Opinion (Nu)

    I was surprised to find myself really liking this by the end. if theres one image I hate, it's poxy, guitar strumming morons who pretty much kill the instrument with their idiocy, and at first, this Ghost character was dangerously close, or rather, still is close, to falling into this category. But I liked the flow and pace, the interactions were surprising and the little comparisons and sensations, the references of taste to apple and salt made for something very different, and memorable. A few grammar oopsies, but thats nothing, the piece worked, painted a picture and left me wondering at myself for enjoying it so much.
    Well done, and good luck.


    • Finis
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      I know the image of that character falls under a certain stereotype,but how else could I describe a person that is apparently so caress that he appears to be from another world from the p.o.w. of a girl who is in love with him. I wanted to be G.G.Marquez simple,but I still have a lot to work until it comes remotely close to that.

      As for the grammar oopsies,English is my second language so although I read it a couple of times before posting I can't see all the mistakes. I'd appreciate if you could list them so I could correct them.

      Thank you.

      • Nu-Speak silver member
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        Nu Nu

        Hey, i'm another user of Nu-Speak account.

        English is also my second language and i find it hard to pick out all mistakes.

        The other Nu-Speak was a little harsh about the sterotype thing because i think it worked really well and gave a new view of it.

        Good luck in the contest.

        Nu-Speak (The one known as NuNu)


  • Iris Doyle
    October 25
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    wow. dude this is brilliant!!!!
    i hope u go far in this contest! excellent work!


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    October 24

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    Very beautiful and emotional letter here. A few grammatical errors here and there, but nothing that can't be caught with a careful read-over. Job well done. I liked how the closing was done and the imagery you presented here was great. Thank you for entering the contest- this was a wonderful entry

    Pixie


  • darthnider
    October 24
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    Realistic and surreal at the same time. This is a beautiful love story.

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