The Three Beautiful Women, Preamble

Their story started long ago...the story of the three beautiful women.. Juniper was the first born from her unattractive mother. This fateful birth became in a small village right on the foothills of the mountain chain Tenes. The village’s name, Carivahall, changed forever. For Juniper was born with such radiance that the citizens of Carivahall feared this tiny child. They where convinced that she was some kind of angle, or witch, for no beauty of this kind had ever been seen. Some thought it best if Juniper was killed but that was against their laws. So it was decided that she would live on the mountain high above them and a young women would care for the mysterious babe. Two full years passed when a baby of the same brilliance was born, this beauty that could not be covered by mud. Her mother named her ‘Arya’ the last words to escape her lips. She too was placed upon the mountain. Arya and Juniper grew for another year when, to the villager’s wonder, a third was born with the same destiny. Her name was Keledry. These pretty children grew to become three beautiful women. Now the real story begins...1

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this story started long ago...with three young kids bored decided to play again the girl fiona wanted to be buetiful 'me too!' said johanna and of course the youngest celestine agreed. thus our story started........
please comment and get adicted. and please help with spelling errors and stuff. believe me their story is intresting... peace to all ~flight

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  • flight
    November 7, 2005
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    awww this isnt going to be a short story. i didnt say that the village name changed, it was the village changed forever. also i didnt put Keledry's mother into the story because none of the mothers are ever really put into this story...and i am DEFINATLY not a perfectionest!!! basically the opposite, i do what i have to. both sides (perfectionest and doing what you have to) can be bad, i know this. also i'm horrible at spelling and i'm glad you caught the 'angle' thing...thanks for reading and i hope you keep doing so!! peace to all ~flight


  • snow fox
    November 7, 2005
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    Good

    Usually, story beginings are called 'Preface' or 'prolgue', but preamble fits too. Watch your paragraphs. And 'angel' will probably sound better than 'angle'. Who was Keledry's mother? What was the village's new name? Why did they fear them so much to send them to live apart? Punctuation would also do well on this story. I'm kind of a perfectionest, so don't mind me much. I get it from the constant nagging from my teachers. But I hope I can help you with this growing story the best I can. I love to write short stories, so if you need any tips, just come to me. Great write

  • flight
    November 4, 2005
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    k.. im glad to have a reader! peace to all ~flight

  • fallenangel006
    November 3, 2005
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    im interested

    well im intregued id like to see where thins is going. please send me a IM when you have the next part out.