Worst luck

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Kirusa stumbled up the steps leaning against the varanda archway. He hiccuped and rubbed his hair from his eyes half-heartidly looking for his keys in his pocket.2

"I- I...hold 'em I wuzzan't goontaa drink!" he declared loudly to himself as he managed to open the door after 5 minutes worth of atempts.3

Closing the door behind him Kirusa went upstairs into his room. Putting his bag on the bed he decided to take a shower, he could smell the liquor stench clinging to him.4

It wasn't that he was an alchoholic, He wasn't even old enough to drink yet. An older friend had gotten a promotion and held a party to celebrate. Dragging an 18 year old to a drinking party was the way he'd chosen to do it. Kirusa hadn't wanted to drink... but as usual he didn't have the winning end of the arguement.5

"Hnn..." Kirusa ended up in the shower for about 6 minutes and grabbing a towel tucked it around his waist walking towards the door he opened it and it made a thud noise resisting him slightly.6

He pushed again wondering and this time it opened up.7

"S-so someone was here!"8

Kirusa blinked at the man standing about 2 metre's away holding his face, he tilted his head and as he took a step forward...his towel fell off.9

"Aggh!! Eeek! cover up!"10

The man backed away tripping over a chair.11

"Well that's a bit embarrassing" Kirusa murmered and without a word pulled a pair of pants from his closet. He put them on and chose to go without a shirt.12

'So...who's the clumsy guy?'13

Kirusa blinked as the thought only just entered his head. He turned around to see the guy standing by the door holding a knife.14

"S-stay back! I'm serious! I know how to use this!"15

'A filleting knife? He knows how to cook?' Kirusa felt his stomach rumble and put his hand on it.16

"I'll kill you if you take another step!" The man threatened as he stuffed some of Kirusa's things into a bag with his free hand, he was slightly nervous...Well he had every right to be. For Kirusa's age he was tall and strongly built (though he doesn't notice it himself) He had the figure of someone who'd knock your lights out if you even looked at them the wrong way.17

Kirusa jumped forward startling the man.18

"I said stay where you are!"19

Kirusa shook his head "No you didn't...you said not another step, why're you changing the rules mister?"20

'Is-is this guy...honestly that stupid..?'21

Making a bolt down the stairs the man decided he'd find something more valuable, if the kid showed up he'd teach him a 'filleting' knife's true power. Kneeling in the lounge room he began going through Kirusa's side table drawers. One was locked and he cursed under his breath.22

"Here ya go."23

The man took the key that was handed to him muttering a thanks and unlocked it. "Wait....what!?"24

He spun around to see Kirusa standing behind him watching curiously.25

"Whatcha doing?"26

The guy lost his temper and swung at Kirusa. Kirusa leant away from it and blinked "But what about dinner?"27

"D-dinner!?"28

The guy decided Kirusa was obviously of his rocker.29

"Oh...are you a burglar?" Kirusa asked in an innocent tone.30

"Yep, thats right kiddo, the best burglar in this town!"31

He bragged.32

Kirusa put a finger to his lip "Your the best? So....falling over chairs helps?"33

"Argh! Just shut up!"34

Kirusa did as he was told, he had begun sobbering up already, but since he was a bit of a slow person normally...It didn't change much.35

"If your...a Burglar...then shouldn't I make you leave?"36

The man stood up leaning against the wall, he smiled with arms folded "How will you do that?"37

Kirusa thought for a minute. "Gambling"38

"...excuse me...?"39

"Gambling! I lose you get what you want. I win you leave without it."40

The man thought this sounded interesting, it'd been a while since he'd gambled.41

"Well..what are we betting on?"42

Kirusa shook his head smiling drunkenly 'You's dun get it..not what. whuu!"43

The man remained silent waiting for him to continue.44

"Okay! So! Uh... Oh yeah! Who can run down to the shops the fastest!"45

The guy starred at him "Your...kidding right..."46

"Wha' ya mean kiddin'? I is seriuous as always!" Kirusa made an attempt to sit on the couch which ended up with him sitting on the floor.47

"Rules are simple, whoever can run there an' back fastest wins. But! We each take each others cell phone!"48

The man didn't get the last part...but deciding it was a stolen phone anyway he wasn't going to lose much. 49

They exchanged phones.50

"Okay! On your mark, get set...."51

The man braced himself, he knew he could win this.52

"Gooobers!!!"53

The guy tripped suprised "What?"54

"Uh..I dunno." Kirusa ran out the door making the guy blink then chase after him.55

The guy noticed that Kirusa was fiddling with something as he ran and frowned.56

"You got a girlfriend name Beatrice, huh?" Kirusa called back and the guy realised what he was doing. He was going through his phone.57

"That's my mother!"58

"Your mum's your girlfriend?"59

"N-no! Idiot! Beatrice is my mothers name! My girlfriend Is Monica- Wait.. why am I telling you this!?"60

The guy still hadn't caught up and Kirusa continued to look through the phone.61

"Oooh` She's pretty! I like her! I'm gonna send her a text!"62

"Oi! Don't you dare! I'll send something to your friends!" The man threatened and took out Kirusa's phone. Turning it on he starred dumbly at the screensaver that was a picture of the telly tubbies.63

He didn't even get the chance to do as he'd threatened because the phone's battery died. 64

Meanwhile Kirusa was texting with one hand "Love...Kiki-chan!"65

he said the words as he typed them.66

The man got pissed, this had gone on long enough. He ran as quickly as he could and didn't even notice when Kirusa ran right past the shops.67

"Lets play tag~"68

Kirusa pressed enter as he finished and put the phone his pocket. He rubbed his eyes and grinned "100% recovery!"69

There was one odd thing about Kirusa...he was extremely bad at handling liquer...but.. he sobbered up extremely fast.70

He couldn't remeber why he was running but changed his destination and ran into the nearest store.71

"I'll trap the guy!" The man decided and ran in after him. He didn't get very far and bashed into someone falling back.72

"Ah! S-sir are you alright?" The man looked up to see a beautiful woman looking down at him.73

Kirusa was standing against a wall smiling "I win" he declared74

"Like hell I care about that now---.."75

The man was distracted by the woman leaning over him.76

'Pervert' the woman and Kirusa thought in unisen.77

"Alright..well Mira I'll leave him to you"78

Kirusa walked out the door without waiting for any reply.79

When he paused outside the door he looked up at the broken sign. Kicking the wall it lit up again. "Bar lucky-boy"80

he re-read the sign post by the door.81

"Today, male crossdressers welcomed. dress to your favourite theme. Cowboy, Cop, Burglar. All welcome. Stay and enjoy our weird and wonderful events"82

Walking back to the house Kirusa blinked as he felt something sharp in his other pocket. He pulled out the guys knife and blinked "Oh yeah...I took this didn't I."83

He shrugged and tossed it into a bush before walking into the house.84

He'd nicked it when the guy wasn't looking, sneaky? Maybe..but considering Kirusa was a pick-pocket it was a habit.85

Going upstairs he lay on his bed thinking. "I forgot to mention..Mina is a karate black belt...." he rolled onto his side yawning "Oh well."86

Author notes

I tried, I'm sorry if it's a bit confusing (Oookay...very confusing.) It's my fault for writting it at 1:40 in the morning after staying up till 3am 5 days straigh. Anyway.hope you were able to make some sense of it. ^^

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  • PurpleSensibility
    November 16
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    I like this piece very much. I love how you used humor, which I hadn't expected anyone to bring to the table. A drunk using manipulation unknowingly? A commemorable feat.
    Though there were a few bits that were confusing, especially in the end, and it seemed a bit rushed after a while. And the burgaler was a tad unrealistic. But other than that, it was very well-written.
    Thank you very much for entering my contest and the best of luck to you!


  • aub-burrito
    November 15
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    This seems a little unrealistic. The actions of the burgaler are way too silly to be true. A real buragler would probably be agressive espically if he has done this before. Also running past the destination and having the boy leave the other man to a girl who is a black belt didn't make sense. If he is so strong and tall couldn't he just beat him up? And how did the boy know the girl?

    Be careful with details, but interesting take.


  • emmmmmaaahhhh
    October 22
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    Ha I love it! Haha. Being as wierd as I am I did make sence of it XD haha. Love it.


  • Danni.
    October 22

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    it was really goowb~ I didn't understand some of it, as I was spaced out for most of the time I was reading..Sorry..

    Anyways! For some reason, my eyes are watering. I am not crying, but I dunno why they are watering...XDD


  • Go Go Inaro-Lily
    October 21

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    >: D And I wrote this at 6:40 in yeh mornin`syydoo!

    `Tish fuuneh. I don't know what else to write, and I'm not really writing this. mah fingyys are just teh MOOOOVIINNNNNGGG. Yush. Weeel, brrrrnananas!

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