My version of Beauty

Beauty is doing something kind for someone else, just because1

Beauty is helping your little brother when you have better things to do2

Beauty is standing up for what you believe even when you will get ridiculed for it3

Beauty is helping that old lady with her grocery bags4

Beauty is doing the right thing even when no one is watching5

Beauty is not giving up even when life sucks6

Beauty is making your own path in life7

Beauty is having confidence in yourself8

Beauty is standing up for yourself9

Beauty is learning to be yourself 10

Beauty is loving others11

Beauty is laughing, just because12

Beauty is taking the life's worst moments and finding something good 13

Beauty is love

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  • Lake Absence
    October 20

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    Nice

    There are a couple things you could do to improve, but it was a nice premice. One of the things that struck me is that all of your lines seem disjointed and unrelated, like a list instead of one singular piece about beauty. Also, lines one and twelve both end in "just because". Maybe in line twelve you can say "Beauty is laughing at the little things", since it stays true to the meaning, but doesn't repeat a prior line. I think you could fix the effect of this piece by changing the positions of the lines, having the very occasion specific lines at the beginning, going broader and broader, until you have the final line, "Beauty is love", which is itself, a very cliche thought, but only cliche because it's true. x] Thanks for entering in my contest. <3