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Jealously, is like a slippery eel wriggling in your stomach. It’s like a gust of unclean air gagging you. There are no real words to explain the feeling, when your heart feels like its impossibly deflating because your blood is boiling with fury. Along with the boiling blood, it’s icy dread...like swallowing a muddy ice cube. 2
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This is perfect...
...at capturing such a powerful emotional state.
Excellent descriptive dialogue which evokes both imagery and emotion, like we can taste the very mud such a deadly sin (envy) produces.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Oh, I love it. It's so intense!! And a little bit sickening...but I say that in the nicest possible way!! It makes me despise jealousy!!
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