I'm not suppose to be here. I'm not suppose to exist. I've known that four a long time. Since I was born. My 'family' has never let me forget it. A human vampire. The very thought was impossible once upon a time, as Aunt Page likes to remind me. A mortal, born with immortal strengths. Never. I am a first, Uncle Sam tells me, and hopefully a last. For the thought of a witches blood mingeling with a vampire's is unthinkable.1
I use to fall asleep listening to my Aunt Tili telling me stories of my mother, Cassandra Morson, a powerful High Priestess to the royal throne and my father, Tantem, the Vampire Prince of Night. I use to dream of them. it sounded so much like Romeo and Juilet. I fantisized about what it must of been like for my mother. Finding the love of her life, running off into the moonlight and fighting all odds to be together. Only when I was older would I find out just how much they really were like Romeo and Juliet. That they didn't run anywhere.2
The same people who had once loved and promised to protect them, had band together to burn them both for the love that they held so dear. They died together, only a month after I was born, given to Aunt Tili and Uncle Damien to protect against the judgement of Aunt Page and Uncle Sam. They had only agreed to keep me, because of my mother. Acording to Aunt Page, my mother placed a curse upon her and her husband, should she ever turn me over to the Royal Wiccan Court. The Aunts never would tell me what the curse was, but the hate etched on Aunt Page's and Uncle Sam's face has always been visible. I can always see the fear and distaste in their eyes and in the eyes of their children, my three cusions.3
It has lasted over fourteen years, but soon, very soon, that may all end. For tomorrow, I am being thrust into the same world that killed my parents. I know I must keep my true identity a secret. I know my life depends on it. I fear for both my life and the life of my family, Aunt Tili and Uncle Damien. The ones who have always truly cared. if the RWC finds who I am, not only will I burn, but they will to. Oh, Goddess Nyx of Night, watch over your faithful servant. Please protect thoe who have kept me safe....4
Kayla Taylor.
Author notes
This is a work in progress, don't know where I'm going with it yet...
In a list
Okay, I'm having computer problems and spell check isn't working well...any help will be great!
Comments
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First off, I think this sounds like it could be an awesome story! I love most anything about vampires esp. Underworld and True Blood. I also love it when there's a female vampire lead like it seems will be included in your story.
The witch crossed with vampire aspect is very interesting. I've never read anything quite like before and I would certainly be interested in reading this one. Your characters sound really interesting, and I'm already wanting to read this story!
Please do let me know when you add it up, and welcome to storywrite!
Joann
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thanks for the comment. I was inspired by Twilight, with the whole Half-human half-vampire thing. I was also inspired by one of my favorite tv shows forever! Charmed! Which is where the witch part comes in. I've actually rewritten the beginning and hope to post it today, thanks again!
Janie
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Good premise--nice language
Yes, well, I tell myself I'm too over the vampire scene (except for Buffy, of course) but I like the idea you have of a forbidden love and a mixed background.
Could make the language a little less choppy. As in p1 "...and hopefully a last, for witches blood mixing with a vampire's is unthinkable." (Don't need 'the thought of' because you already have unthinkable, and "for" makes a better start to a phrase than a sentence).
There are a bunch of spelling errors, but if you fix your spellcheck, you'll catch most of them, except you need "for" not "four" in p1.
Good luck. keep writing--it's a fresh idea.
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thanks for the comment. I'm actually going to revise it and start it out different, to give it a little more flare. Thanks for the grammar checks. Hopefully my computer will be fixed soon.
god bless,
Janie
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