There's a Void in the Sky

There's a void in the sky1

An inky hole, where the land and clouds divide2

When it rains there's an echo3

A voice that screams No, no, with a breathless cackle4

Beady eyes from the darkness5

Search the soul and find its lightness6

Leaving charred memories7

Of a clear blue sky, like its reflecting seas8

Fluttering sounds, feathery beats9

Enticing the wind to let its captives from their seats10

Promises are whispered, completed, submitted11

And in reaching the end of the emptiness12

We are all rejected13

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  • rinzu
    October 29
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    thats nice...the words flowed beautifully especially the last few lines...

    good luck


  • Go Go Inaro-Lily
    October 22

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    "Promises are whispers, completed, submitted"

    XD I don't know why, but I'm in love with this line. This poem is great~! You definately have talent. The sentences flowed beautifully.. It's awesome~

  • I Write naked gold member
    October 22
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    I liked it nice little poem here and you were right it didn't take long at all


  • MidnightEclipse gold member
    October 19
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    Great flow

    Very good. It read and flowed very well and I liked the meaning behind. Short and sweet, great job!


  • darthnider
    October 19
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    Tactile

    Lovely poem - its almost tactile. You have a gift


  • Jailrobin
    October 18
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    verdict: awesome

    i like it, maddie, it's like thought. can i feature it on Ushanka?

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