First Part of Beverly Hills

The Gates Estate
Mikayla’s Bedroom
Tuesday, July 27th
7:15 am1

Beep! Mikayla Gates yawned as she sat up and turned off her Accenda Alarm Clock. She got out of bed and grabbed her fuchsia-purple Loro Piana Classica Cashmere Robe and put it on. She looked at her reflection in her purple-framed mirror. Her curly black hair looked even more fabulous as it did yesterday. She flashed her pearly-white teeth, her full, dark pink lips formed a mysterious smile, and she spun around. Her silk, knee length leopard-print nightgown flew with the breeze from her ceiling fan.
“It’s Jacqueline! Answer your phone already! We don’t have all day!” Her best friend’s soft, sweet voice came out of Mikayla’s iPhone. It had been recorded to be her ringtone for every time Jacqueline texted.2

Jacqueline-Bonjour, BFF!3

Mikayla-Rite back at U!4

Stephanie- Wat up?5

Alexys-Wat up??? Bad things...6

Jacqueline-Like..?7

Alexys-Oh, nothin. Just, my mom’s so busy, she can’t design the awesomest designer clothes for the 1st day! I only have 1 day 2 go to NM!8

Mikayla-She’s 1 of the world’s top designers! She can’t whip something up 2day?9

Alexys-She’s in Paris 4 a meeting 10

Stephanie-Dont cry! I’ll go 2!11

Mikayla-Me 2!12

Jacqueline-Me 3!13

Alexys-Sweet. Get ready. I’ll pick you up at 7:45 and then we’ll carpool 2 school!14

Jacqueline-Ok!15

Mikayla-Awesome!16

Stephanie-Cool!17

Alexys-L8R!
Click!
Mikayla-L8R!
Click!
Stephanie-L8R!
Click!
Jacqueline-L8R!
And Click!

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  • MadiPadi
    October 16
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    Very descriptive and creative! Keep writing!

  • kaitlynchicky5
    October 16
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    Wow

    This could possibly be the new Clique series. Coming from an 11 year old, this is really good. Sorry for going onto your account, sweetie!
    ~Aunt Sara

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.