Loch Lomond

My feet skipped across the green Earth as I made my way to the large, beautiful lake that lay ahead of me. I gripped my flute tightly in my hand, not wanting to drop the bonnie instrument. It shined brightly in the sparkling summer sunlight.1

I glanced to my left and saw a glimpse of the lake. It glittered with pure radiance. I smiled and thought of the days that I had spent here last summer with my father. Those days were gone now, however, for he had passed away two months ago on my birthday. I pushed that thought out of my head and kept up my quick pace.2

I emerged from behind a few trees fronting the vast lake and stood next to it, just watching its beauty reflect into my eyes. Time passed rapidly and I remembered that I still had my flute with me. I quickly sat down on the edge of the lake and held my flute to my lips. I waited, then played the only song that dwindled in my mind.3

I closed my eyes and out of the instrument came ‘Loch Lomond'.4

As the notes slipped from the wee instrument, I swayed slightly to the lively melody. The song now came naturally to me and I played like the music was the only thing that made up my soul. 5

I slowed the pace of the song as the end of the piece drew near. I then stretched the ending note as long as my breath would hold out. When I cut it off, I opened my eyes and stared out far across the water. 6

A faint outline of a man appeared in the clear, blue waters a few meters away. Puzzlement clouded my thoughts, but, when the image clarified enough for me to see it, I saw the smile of my father beaming at my now bright face.7

The picture dimmed, then faded out. 8

His smile still lingered in my imagination, as will it always. I waved to where the vision had been and then whispered, “For thou will be always missed.”9

Author notes

No, none of this happened to me, but I did have a dream identical to this.

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  • Lost Soul 12 silver member
    October 19

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    Hi! Thanks for entering my contest! This seems like a very interesting story!

    Aww, you lost your father? It adds the perfect amount of sympathy and emotion. Very (!) good descriptions!

    A very serene piece, not to actiony, blood, horrorific, etc. Just a simple, lovely piece! Good job Finalist

  • Diaboro
    October 16

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    With the attached picture, the imagery in this dream was very powerful, almost crystal clear. Made me a little bit sad.

  • ohshckaori
    October 15

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    It's very well written. I like the whole concept. Dreams do tend to be really god inspiration. The song Loch Lomond has always been one of my favorite.

    I did notice, in the first paragraph you write "as I make my way " but then everything else is in past tense.

    Great job.


  • Oleander
    October 15

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    Lovely

    Wow. What a lovely dream! I love those types of dreams. They seem to mix mythological elements from deep within our souls and hearts.


  • Miss Chell
    October 15

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    I was anticipating the author notes to see if this really had happened to you. But a dream of yours! The best inspiration comes from a dream. My writing teacher told me to keep a notebook by my bed and if I woke up in the middle of the night from a dream, to write it down and make sense of it later and possibly make something out of it as well.

    Anyway, I loved the idea of a the flute being the characters inspiration. Going to a beautiful utopia-like place to play and remember her father. It was so vivid and dream-like and you got your story across wonderfully.


    • HopefulSoul
      October 17
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      Wow, that sounds like such a great idea! Praise the writing teachers of today!

      kokofuto

  • I Write naked gold member
    October 15

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    I liked this it painted a nice picture and seemed very poetice great job


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 15

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    This was well written. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Ryzingkat
    October 15

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    I liked this a lot

    It was a great example of a short story. Qucik, well-written and to the point.


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    October 14

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    Sounds very pretty and fairytale-like. I enjoyed this short dream 'tale' and could picture this with ease. Almost gave a soft melancholy feel toward the end, but a bit inspirational at the same time. Good work and thanks for entering

    Pixie

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