Keep It Out

All the bad memories, Keep them out
All the lovers, Keep them out
Cold, Cool, Crushed, Broken
These ugly words so easily spoken1

The eyes of sadness emitting nothing but happiness
The mask is unveiled like the bride of a wedding
Her eyes so crisp, so clear and bright
She blinks back the tears with all her might2

These ugly words abandoned by love
Are so beautiful, there is no other word

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  • Paper.thin.paradox
    October 25

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    The mask is unveiled like the bride of a wedding

    Hm, should this be 'The mask is unveiled like that of a bride's' because you already know it's at a wedding =P

    These ugly words abandoned by love
    Are so beautiful, there is no other word

    I love this! Ugly and yet beautiful. Oxymorons ftw, my friend You know how I love those xD

    Her eyes so crisp, so clear and bright
    She blinks back the tears with all her might

    Gave a brilliant rhyme and image.

    All the bad memories, Keep them out
    All the lovers, Keep them out

    This makes it seem like the bad memories are from the lovers, powerful lines.

    Love it, hun :]





    ~Amy


  • SCREAMxTOxxBExHEARD
    October 14

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    This is great. I love it