Blood Lake

(Didn't know what to call it! . Anyways, First First-Person. Since It did happen in a Dream. Though, it will be told like a Story.)1

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Leaves crackled under My feet as if to give away My presence in the burnt dreary Forest. It seemed like I was walking on forever through an endless road, but I stopped at the sound of a crying voice. It sounded familiar, and so did the scream that ringed in My ears.3

I ran further into the Black smokey Forest to the sound of a Baby's cry, but what I came to was not a Child, but a Wardrobe in a vast plain of ash. I ventured nearer towards it, My fingers wrapping around the two knobs. My instincts were telling Me not to open it, but as usual I did not listen. I creaked them open, a small crack. nothing was jumping out, it seemed safe to open further.4

Blood poured out of Me, making Me close My eyes as it washed Me off My feet, At first My mind wasn't thinking anything, until I realized the irony like taste in My throat. I choke out the blood in disgust once I swam atop. I was now in a lake of blood, the sight and smell of it almost made Me fall faint but I was intent on getting to the Child I heard crying and the scream that sounded like My Mother's, and so I swam through the blood, pushing it aside and moving My legs, I grabbed onto the inside walls of the Wardrobe, using it to pull Me up. but I pulled too hard, or that is what I thought. I felt as if I was pushed, thrown into it. My face twisted up in confusion when I noticed the landing wasn't hard, but soft. I opened My eyes as the sound of slimy swishing, screaming when I saw the insides of Humans I had landed on. another glanced at it and I realized it was the intestines of Animals.5

The stench made Me dizzy, almost making Me vomit but I held it in, luckily enough I had barely anything to hold in judging on the amounts of Dinner I ate a few hours ago.6

My eyes trailed away from the mutilated carcasses, to a hill. of flesh and the revealed bodies of Humans that made My stomach churn and My body jolt, I dared to look higher. seeing a little boy standing atop the naked distraught faces of the dead people.7

The words- "Finally, a Siberian."- came out of the little's boy's mouth covered with blood, another trail of ruby blood dripping off of his hands.8

I awoke with a scream into the morning, with My Sister shaking Me by the arms roughly. "What the hell is the matter with You!?"9

I looked at her, saying only a few words that didn't come out with a voice.10

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(If that was over 3,000, Sorry... But it was true! Sisi's Stories sometimes have a lot of horror, when I heard the boy say "Siberian" I was like, "Oh boy..." And then I knew it was a dream, but it seemed so real!!! If there were two entries allowed, I would have also done the Dream Sisi had. . She had this one too, I had this one after she had it. Reason why I wanted to get to the voices so much? It sounded like My little Brother and My Mother...)

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  • Stellaqt2
    October 15

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    IT WAS REALLY GOOD AND CREEPY!!!!!!!!! IT WAS ALSO KINDA STRANGE!!!!!!! BUT REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!

    beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    October 14

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    Creepy and strange. Good visuals that you provided as well here. Some errors (starts of sentences not being capitalized, and words that didn't need to be capitalized were), but overall engaging and dark. Thanks for sharing and entering

    Pixie

  • The name of this really popped out at me, I love the title, and the writing was great! I loved it (don't like pointing out errors) and keep writing!!!

  • I Write naked gold member
    October 13

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    Wow intense dream A few comment: You capitalized a bit too much. You mixed your tenses a couple times. I didn't see the point of mentioning how much you ate earlier. I really liked the picture you painted. For such a weird scene, I thought you did a great job with the visuals. I would be interested in what a person who interperts dreams said about this.


    • SororalAngel
      October 13

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      Well... It was because I did eat. . It's a real Dream, so I'm mentioning things like that. I knew I should have gone with My instincts and not put it there... Thanks. .


  • Iris Doyle
    October 13
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    so can u like control ur dreams???

    • SororalAngel
      October 13
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      Well... Actually, I can. . Not all the time though, Like in this one. Only in the Common ones like with random Monsters, Kid-Dreams. Then I can, but not Dreams with horror like this. It's like it's showing Me something. Otherwise, I can even give Myself powers like Superman. . You have to think about it real hard, close Your eyes or something, and really wish it! Keep training Yourself, and it will happen. but usually a guy out of thin-air ruins it by having Powers himself! and then attacks Me! I can't always give Myself powers, but I can often float when I find no other way out and jump off a building or window. . I fly!

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