Kill

I take up my gun, it's a Beretta. They're good guns - powerful, yet easy to conceal. Perfect for me. 1

You see, I have a hobby. It's not a common hobby. I don't collect anything, and I don't play video games or anything. No, my hobby is much more... interesting. I kill.2

I know what you're thinking. You're thinking that I'm a psychotic maniac. But the thing is, I'm not. I kill because it gives me a thrill - it gets me high. I kill because, well, because I can. And I'm good at it, too.3

I first killed some twenty years ago, but it was for a good reason. I had received a death threat. It wasn't from the mob or anything like that, but it was a death threat all the same. I owned a black pistol from when I was a cop, so I grabbed that and went to the man's apartment.4

I asked him if he wanted me dead. He said yes. I shot him.5

It was as simple and sweet as that.6

That's when I became addicted.7

Now I kill all the time. Once, twice a week. I get my gun - a Beretta, since it's better than the weaker handgun, which I kept for what you could call sentimental reasons - and I open the phone book. I try to choose randomly - I don't want to get caught, do I? Then I go to their address and I kill them.8

It's short and wonderful -9

And it gives me a great high.10

Just one more thing before I close up this message:11

Keep both eyes open.12

You're next.13

Author notes

Yeah, this was a contest poem, for anyone who doesn't know. I know I've been writing a lot of lyrics lately, but I still enter contests, people!

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  • October 29, 2005
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    You write a lot like I do. Most of my stories (the ones that I don't have posted) are much like this one... The details and emotions are left to almost a bare minimum...I think in a way this leaves the reader to feel what they would naturally. It's a great way to write.

    However, I think that you could have put more emotion into the writing without writing about the emotion. I know that you were kind of leaving the detail a bit dry...you could've tried stronger words that are less ordinary. You could also throw in words that don't quite fit when you think about them ordinarily. It forces your readers to get out of their own mind set and into the twisted mind of your character.

    -Moles.

    Oh! And thanks for keeping it short. I don't know why, but I never really feel like reading anything long on AP, so I really appreciate it when people post really short stories every once in a while ...Thanks!

  • willay
    October 29, 2005
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    it slays me

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