We were both young when I first saw you1
I close my eyes2
And the flashback starts3
I'm standing there4
On school grounds in chilly air5
See the lights,6
See the teens the heavy coats7
See you make your way through the crowd8
And say hello9
Little did i know10
That you were Edward you were throwing glances11
And my daddy said stay away from Bella12
And i was crying on the staircase13
Begging you please don’t go, and i said14
Edward take me somewhere we can be alone15
I’ll be waiting all there's left to do is run16
You’ll be the vampire and I’ll be the victim17
Its dramatic story baby just bite me18
So i sneak out to the woods to see you19
We keep quiet 'cause we’re dead if they knew20
So close your eyes21
Let’s escape this town for a little while22
Cause you were Edward i was a brand of heroine23
And my daddy said stay away from Bella24
But you were everything to me25
I was begging you please don’t go and i said26
Edward takes me somewhere we can be alone27
I’ll be waiting all there's left to do is run28
You are the vampire and I’ll be the victim29
Its dramatic story baby just bite me30
Edward save me, they're trying to tell me how to feel31
This love is difficult, but its real32
Don’t be afraid we’ll make it out of this mess33
Its dramatic story baby just bite me34
Oh, Oh35
I got tired of waiting36
Wondering if you were ever coming around37
My faith in you was fading38
When i met you on the outskirts of town, and I said39
Edward save me I’ve been feeling so alone40
I keep waiting for you but you never come41
Is this in my head, i don’t know what to think42
He knelt to the ground and pulled out a ring and said43
Marry me Bella you’ll never have to be alone44
I love you and that's all I really know45
I talked to your dad go pick out a shiny car46
Its dramatic story baby just says yes47
Oh, Oh,48
We were both young when i first saw you49
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Comments
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Commentary
I have to agree with SageSyren on this. I don't know if sticking some of the words together was purposely done or not, but nevertheless, this was well written and on its own little beat.
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Well the rhythm was good. Stayed pretty much with the beat of the song. But I wondered about the words you stuck together. Did you do that on purpose? It's very distracting.
Good luck in the contests.
Brooke

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I will fix that right now.
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