No Exit {Book Summary}

Scarlet Michaels finds herself stuck at the local library, working on a research paper for her English class. As she walks home without a care in the world, she doesn’t realize that this would be the last time she would ever be visiting the library or coming home to her parents ever again….1

With no recollection of her kidnapping, Scarlet wakes up to find herself stripped and bound to a bed. She comes to find that her captors are two attractive but terrifying men who have lust on their minds and brought her to their house to make her their pleasure pet. One of them resorts to violence on any one false move Scarlet makes. The other seems sweet but he can be just as wretched. And then there’s the third man in the house, the one person that Scarlet can confide into.2

Disobeying her masters results in severe punishments which lead to drastic measures. Will Scarlet's disobedience become the worst of her and will she ever be given the freedom that she desires?

Author notes

I'm not too good when it comes to writing a summary for anything, really so please do let me know how this sounds or if anything needs to be changed or added to it.

This is for my first novel "No Exit". Below, I've posted the link to the first chapter and another link that contains all the other chapters afterwards. But please note that I'm not finished with the story yet but I am almost done.

Chapter 1: http://storywrite.com/story/318168

http://storywrite.com/list/39420-No-Exit

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  • Color Splash
    October 11

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    Ooooohhh, scary. I was at the edge of my seat with the tension I feel for her. Is this story written in first person? I always feel that more emotion is found in the first person P.O.V.

    Good set up, I'm most definately interested.

    My luck to you in this contest!


    love
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  • Whipper Snapper silver member
    October 11

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    I think the first paragraph is unnessecary because the story doesn't go much into that. I also think that you should omit the part that talks about her few failed escapes because that reveals a bit much. If the reader reads that then starts reading the book, then they already know that Scarlet will fail, and that's kind of disapointing. The part about Rikki is too much. I think it should shallow down to 'the third man in household being one person Scarlet might be able to trust.' or something along those lines. It would also be good to mention one of the captors having a violent side or how he resorts to violence on any one false move Scarlet makes.

    See, the summary you find on the back of the book shouldn't tell you what's happening, it should lure the reader in by leaving things unanswered and mysterious. Therefore making the reader read the book to find out the answers for themselves. And I think the last sentence would be a bit better without mentioning 'will she be a slave forever' when people know it wouldn't be great story if she was. And of course, 'her love for Rikki', you don't want people to know she falls in love with Rikki before they read the story.

    But, on a positive note, I do like the part about her walking home from the library, not realizing it would be the last time she visits the library, so on and so forth. And I like the first two sentences in the thrid paragraph. I really like how you went from being mysterious with the 'last time' stuff and then saying straight out, "with no recollection of her kidnapping..." That part is really good.

    Hope that helped!


    • Poison.
      October 11
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      This most definitely helped me out! I am re-writing it right now and I am taking everything you said to mind as I do so. Thanks for the suggestions and all!