The Indian village part 1

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The sun was scorching. The wide plain spread through the vast distance. The corn field is close by. We walk towards it. We can feel the corn stubs beneath our feet. 2

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We walk past the corn field. We see a hedge. We pull the leaves past us. We feel no fear as there is nothing to feel afraid of, there is nothing to hurt us. We feel soft, nurished grass and leaves beneath our feet.4

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 A deer is seen by the bamboo trees. Its soft silky ears twitch. It comes closer and aproaches us. A sudden cry from a bird of prey breaks the connection between animal and man. The magnificent bird swoops down but misses a rabbit as it scurries of into the rainforest.6

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 We walk deeper into the forest. Beams of life shine through the gaps between the trees. A rhythem is heard. Its beat saying "Come,Come do not be afraid" We follow the noise. A fire can be seen past the leaves and animals of the forest. We can hear the drumming. They see us. We approach the indian village8

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  • F66142589
    October 10, 2009

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    Your sentences float and you made me curious. This is not at all what I want in my contest, but bravo!


    • blueyice11
      October 13, 2009
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      thx. I think you did well choosing the winners. On your next contest I'll keep in mind their style of writing but thx anyway