The Abyss (Unfinished)

The Abyss1

By Travis Weston2

It's been 5 years since the demons took over, I was 20 when it happened, when the earth opened up and the demons escaped. I lived in L.A., though there are no longer countries, or cities. Nothing is left except for a few colonies that have survived by fighting the demons.3

My name is Samuel Riviera, when I was younger I was a writer, this is my recordings of what has happened so far, for the demons are not dead--far from it--they are flourishing, growing stronger as we wait, doing nothing but trying to survive. I am the head of a resistence effort in, what used to be called, the state of Maine.4

I have friends here, though it is hard to have friends in a time like this. I remember a very good friend I had a few years ago. We had been friends for months, fighting together, side by side. But, then, one day a demon attack happened and he was killed. I watched him die, watched the demons rip him appart like he was nothing but dead meat, which I guess he must have been to them. They eat the humans, they eat the animals, they eat each other.5

That is when I moved myself to Maine. Most of my resistence efforts have been accomplished, but not without a fair share of casualties. Every person knows they may not live to see tomorrow, but it still isn't anarchy yet. No, people around here still have their dignity, and they still fight. I have seen only 4 or 5 people lay down their weapons and decide to stop fighting, and out of thouse, 3 of them decided to pick their weapons up again. I was one such person.6

In these last 5 years I have killed unnumberable demons. I have also seen too many of my friends die in front of my eyes, it has made me hard and old before my time. I have seen more killing so far in my life then most GI's would see in their entire campaign at war. It hurts me deep to know that we may not win this fight, that the humans that die cannot return to help their fighting families. It takes too long for our young to grow strong, and with our supplies so low--because of the constant burning of our fields, and murder of our cattle--we cannot bring our young up as strong as we would like, so our troops are slowly growing weaker in an attempt to improve the health of our young.7

I, myself, have a young child. He's only 3 years old, and he's lucky to be alive after what happened to his mother. A demon attack was underway, and his mother became in labor in the middle of the fight. The birth went fine, but his mother didn't live. She was murdered by a demon during the birth. The demon that killed her was killed by me, I wear is skin as armor now. 8

I know what you think when I say demons, hell, religion, things like that. Well, your right. The demons opened the doorway to hell and stepped into our world. I was there when it happened. The doorway--one of the many--was in the San Francisco Bay, I was driving across the Golden Gate Bridge when the doorway opened. I had made it to the very end of the bridge, and felt an earthquake start; being from California all my life, I wasn't scared, I knew I had to get off of the bridge though. So I slammed on the gas, and drove onto the ground, and away from the bridge. That's when I heard it. It was a high pitched sound, sort of like an out of tune dog whistle. I got out of my car and ran back to where I could watch what was happening from a safe distance. What I saw shocked me to the very core. The very center of the bridge had dissapeared into a boiling, red, sulfury smelling bay, and the rest of it was on it's way. Cars and people were falling into the boiling water, I could hear their screams even from the distance I was at. And then I saw it. It was horrible, it's skin was as black as coal and mangled. Where a face on a human would have been there was nothing but black. It had the form of an old, fat, human male, but it didn't walk. It floated 5 inches off the ground. It wore nothing but tattered brown clothing that looked as if they had been badly burned. And what shocked me the most was--even after coming out of the San Francisco Bay--it wasn't wet. It's clothing wasn't even damp. I watched it as it floated across the water, and then I ran. I ran because more of them had come out of the boiling water.9

Five years later and I'm still alive.10

TO BE CONTINUED....11

Author notes

This isn't finished right now, but I havn't worked on it in a while and figured I'd see what people thought of it.

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  • ScottWest
    October 31, 2005
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    It is a story, the other person was misslead.


  • ScottWest
    October 31, 2005
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    That's not a poem. It's a story.


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    October 30, 2005
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    Excellent

    Excellent beginning, this is a definite read for me so as soon as you finish the next part I will be reading this. Nothing like a great prologue to start a story. Am waiting patiently for the next chapter.

  • grannyeri
    October 30, 2005
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    This is a story, in story form is it not? Did not know this was a poem, until the last comment. Find it more prose than poetry. I see it is a story, not sure where the above comment came from then.
    Edited on Oct 30, 1:10 because ''.

  • Nathans lullaby
    October 30, 2005
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    how is this not finished? its huge lol. A great write but when I look at a poem thats not in stanzas then my eyes cant focus in on the poem meaning.I guess this is a story so this is the exception.


  • Z-0
    October 29, 2005
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    Interesting if a little muddled. It certainly is bleak and in that you've done an excellent job at conveying both the darkness and confusion in tone.


  • Tangled Angle
    October 28, 2005
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    This is the stories I like to read. Finally, someone that likes to write about the end of the world/apocalypse. I have some end of the world stories, some awesome and some corny. But this has a good chance of making the Top 5 in the contest. Good Luck and great Job!

    -Tyler, Florida (US)

  • Sonja
    October 28, 2005
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    Interesting and little confusing from the begining, but, following your lines, I found great writer with perfect vision and imagination. Everything sounds scary, but I think that was your intention at all. When you said: The demons opened the doorway to hell and stepped into our world. I was there when it happened. ...
    Bravo.
    ~Sonja~

  • severa
    October 28, 2005
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    though there is no such thing anymore. No, there are no longer countries, borders, anything. Nothing is left, after the burning of the cities, except

    the way you use the wrords anything and anymore and the way you repeat the idea of total destruction as if you want to completely hammer it in really does not do it for me. it really was a very interesting read except for me just the first part of whuich i think they are the most important part of any piece of writing

  • GetMuddy
    October 28, 2005
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    woah!!!! thats awesome!!!! i cant wait to read more!! hurry ur butt up! lol keep it up.

  • silvershadow430
    October 27, 2005
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    Wow this is very good! It cought my attention. =] I too, am writing a story at a moment I short one i supose. Well, hopefully you would finish soon! I cant wait to read the rest!

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