Beat me, so I can be reassured that I can feel pain, kiss me, so I can remember what it's like to feel love, kill me, so I can realize what it's like to feel alone. I love you with all my heart but I've fucked myself up so much that I can't tell anymore. The drugs have turned my brain to shit, the booze are killing my liver. I can't live like this anymore, so why don't you just kill me, give me what I deserve. There isn't enough space in this world to keep burnouts like me alive. All those fake fucks that don't know pain can suck my dick, all those football pricks, who made me feel like shit, fuck you! Because tonight, I'm dying alone.1
This is my letter to you dearest, I'm pulling the trigger and ending this.2
Love you forever after, 3
------ >*~Me~*<------
A contest entry
- Emo - with a beautiful twist by Melancholic Smile.
350 points, ended October 9, 21 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Suicide. by hchsknights08.
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i read this for the th billionth time.. no im not a stalker, i love this, its so well composed.. i must say you did a really good job on it.
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Wow, I really liked this. Very emotional and you can really feel the pain of the narrator. one Sudjestion though ," the booze are killing my liver" perhaps you meant the booze is killing my liver. Any way great job. Keep up the great writing
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i love it
wow deep and powerful
thats how i feel all the time
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For such a short amount of words this is very powerful and deep. The only error I noticed was in the sentence 'the booze are killing my liver' - are should be is. It's very emo, as I asked for, but also full of pain and desperation to somehow be saved. I could feel his confidence was at rock bottom. A really moving short piece, thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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sounds like something suicide silence or bring me the horizon would use as lyrics
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