Ravenpaw's Journey :Story 1: The First Dream

"Ravenpaw!" a voice hissed.The muscular jet black tom opened his green eyes.1

"What is it Barley?" he yawned.The plump black & white tom pointed his tail to the entrance of the barn.2

"Supper time!"3

Ravenpaw smiled,"We eat mice,remember?"4

Barley nodded,"But this is speical!"5

The two leg walked in with a bowl,it smelt very good.He sniffed harder,"What is it?" he asked.6

"Chicken!They bring it every once in a while!"7

"Really?"8

Barley nodded."And this might be the first time you've had it!"9

Ravenpaw smiled."I get a bite first!"10

"Who ever can catch the first mouse does!" purred Barley.11

Ravenpaw ran off to find the first mouse,turned out,there was one right in front of him,he leaped & killed it,but turned around & Barley already had four mice.12

"Hah!The plump cat wins again!"13

Ravenpaw narrowed his eyes,"You used the ThunderClan hunting crouch didn't you?"14

Barley nodded."Did you?"15

"No.It brings bat to many memories.." he sighed.16

Barley touched noses with him,"Don't worry.They are fine,go ahead & take first bite,"17

Ravenpaw did & it tasted so good!"It's delicious!" he mumbled.18

Barley nudged him away,"My turn furball!"19

They shared the chicken then went to rest,"Night," yawned Barley,curling into a tight ball.20

"Good-Night," he yawned to the black & white tom.21

Closing his eyes,he began to dream,he was standing on a hill..gazing out onto a forest & lake..22

"The Raven will find a way..to those who it once called family..but it may be a difficult,especially to those it meets along the way.." a voice said in the wind.23

He looked around,then spotted a blue gray she cat with blue eyes,a familiar face he knew since he was a kit..a face he never said good-bye to when he left ThunderClan..it was his old leader..Bluestar.24

"Bluestar!" he gasped,sorrow filling his heart.25

Bluestar closed her eyes & faded away..leaving the words.."You are that raven.."26

Ravenpaw woke up,it was midnight.He closed his eyes remembering the prophecy..27

'What does it mean..?" he thought.

Author notes

Yea,it's short,but there is going to be a few,between 3-5 I think.Hope you liked it!

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  • Tangledbracken
    October 7

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    Nice job! I like how you made a prophecy for Ravenpaw, who everyone pretty much forgot after the first series was over... I enjoyed reading this, though in some places you had 'finger stumbles' or, quite stoutly, bad grammar. Please work on your grammar-based errors, and you might be on your way to writing the perfect fan-fic!
    ~Goddess~


    • Sweetrose
      October 8
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      Oops.Thanks for telling me,I didn't check to see if I messed up.


  • Doverstar
    October 7
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    Kewlness! Awesome! I totally love ravenpaw!!!!!

  • Sweetrose
    October 6
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    Thanks,prophecies are hard!It took me a bit for that one..anyways,I don't know when the next will be out,probably in 1-4 days.Depends when I can be back on.


  • Willowleaf-
    October 6

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    Nice start to a story! I could never come up with good story ideas. Well, I can't wait to read more! And by the way, you're good with making prophecies.

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