A Lovely Death

The bitter fall air rushes through my hair, and tickles my nose. I zip up my jacket as the cool air clings to me. As I sit on the chilly roof top the sound of leaves trickling down the asphalt shingles soothes my insides. My eyes rest on the far away trees, a rainbow of deep reds, yellows, oranges, and browns feed my eyes.1

Mother Natures is making death a beautiful and cherishable concept. Soon she will bury her dead in a heavy blanket of white wonder. The man in the box predicts the funeral will be next week, for Mother Nature is not yet done her lovely killing spree. The funeral is not so bad though, a sparkley, pristine blanket floats down from the sky every year. I'll grab a hot cocoa and a warm fuzzy blanket to keep me warm as I pay my respects.2

I climb down the roof as the sun is falling asleep. Mother Natures' cold breath is getting stronger, and I don't want to freeze in it. The dead crinkle and crunch beneath my feet. My hand reaches for the door, I know summer heat hides behind it. I slowly make my way to bed. As I lay in my cozy nest I take a deep breath and close my eyes. I exhale... I wonder what colors Mother Nature will bring at sunrise...

Author notes

The poem "Mother Natures' Four Emotions" was inspired by this short story.

Can you feel/hear/see/smell Mother Nature?

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  • Willowleaf-
    October 8

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    Wow, this was a beautiful story. I didn't see any spelling or grammar errors, which is awesome. Welcome to the site and have fun writing!
    ~Lily


  • So Strange Greeters member
    October 8

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    Good Story

    Aside from some grammatical mistakes, I didn't find anything in this story that I didn't enjoy thoroughly. I think you have a good mind for imagery and your descriptions are very vivid, as well, especially for a new member of the site. But then again, that is probably only because you have written a lot of stories while you weren't a member of the site. I believe I'll be reading more of your stories as you post them, because they are definitely written well.

    Your capitalization is good. It's just some of your wordings that don't flow as well as I wish they would. If it weren't for a few mistakes in that area, I would say this story is flawless, because your descriptions are very vivid and I quite enjoy your writing style.

    Welcome to the site and enjoy the site, keep up the good writing and look into the grammar for this story. If you do all three of those things, you should be fine and so should everyone else.