Faerie Dust

Chapter 11

"Pixie..Pixie..God bless. wake up you imbecile.!!!!!"2

"Whaaa-..Oh shoot..Yes ma'am...Right away ma'am..Sorry ma'am.."3

I swear if I have to say yes ma'am one more time I might actually lose it.4

Oh Hi I'm Pixie.Not by choice either.5

My mother was obsessed with childish fantasy's.6

She was crazy that woman. But My mum none the less. 7

I barely knew her. Been raising my own since I was 6.8

And ahh It's such a dreary story and I don't want to make you all sad when you're all uppity at this precise moment.9

But... I remember one time my mother told me something. She told me,'Pixie girl one day you should relax.Breathe. Believe in magic. It's out there all around you, and you just gotta find it. I love you honey..goodnight.' Then I found her on my own dead in her bed.10

Pixie..ha..the very word..brings tears to my face..and anger at her childlike words." Pixie blows her nose loudly on her hankerchiff.11

Childish nonsense. Try believing in magic when your mama's dead.12

Try believing when you've had to raise yourself when you were six.13

Try believing when..when...ehm when believing hurts to much..and you can't bare the weight because your mother was a big fan of magic.14

And if you do believe and yeah I know you believe..and then one day some kid comes up to you or some grown person and says,'Why don't you grow up.It's time you stopped believing in such nonsense.Magic is not real.'What then do you have? But a pile of tears and hurt.15

And you have a father who drinks till there is no more. And then forces you to make love to him?16

Tell me there's magic..I dare you.17

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Summer.The hot air on my neck feels fine after such a hard winter.19

And Tom here just makes it all the better. Sweet, Innocent, Sheltered Tom, Whose parents would kill him if they knew we were married. Tom with the red hair and the freckles and the soft lips.20

Tom with the upbeat personality and the father of our baby.(sHHHHHHHH don't tell him yet!!) Tom with the dream of becoming a NBA allstar. He walks up the walk towards me and kisses me gently on the lips..mmmmmmhhmhmhmhm..."hello Tom."21

"Hey pixie stick."22

"UGH..Is that really necessary?"23

"no I just do it to make you pout like that."He smiles maniacally.24

"Well now you just blew it because now this water is going on your head."25

'You wouldn't."26

"I would."And with that I poured it all over his perfectly perfect red hair.27

"Oh I'm gonna get you pix."And I screamed and ran like I was scared because yeah..he made me act like I was actually my age of 15 years. 28

Then suddenly I stopped. I fell and I couldn't breathe. He screams ,"Pixie wake up."29

I'm off in my own world battling this war called my life.30

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"She just stopped breathing sir..no I did not kill her!!!I freak'n loved that damnable woman1!"32

"Ha.right and I'm sure you love explosives too.Nobody loved that mess."33

"Well I did."34

Chapter 4.35

Tonight I'm going to kill myself. I'm going to jump off the building.36

With a knife in my chest.37

"I loved You pix. I loved you!!"He screamed.38

(Later that night)39

"Yeah bout killed himself that one...Huh?..No we didn't force this upon him...40

No I don't have any idea why he killed himself...No I don't have a clue if this is related to Pixie's murder.Uh..huh..uh.huh..true love you say..could be..."41

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  • Marta gold member
    October 7

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    It has potential but, a lot of what I read was unclear.

    Still, you did rise to the challenge and that is commendable.

    Good luck in the contest.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    October 6

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    To be honest, it does need a lot of work for grammar and does seem unclear in areas. The storyline has potential and I liked the attitude that it started out in. Overall, with some work, it might could be good.

    Thanks for entering and taking the challenge

    Pixie


  • Lost Soul 12 silver member
    October 6

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    Has great potential to be an excellent story, but I think the grammar makes it not as good as it could be. Some of the writing is very unclear...