One day Eliza decided to go to the store. She was in her pajamas so she quickly brushed her long curly black hair and put on her super sparkly green long sleeve top and her dark jeans. She went to the door and put on her red flip flops, grabbed her car keys and went outside. She hopped into her Metallic Blue convertible and started it. She drove for about 5 minutes and she was at the store. She went inside and went to the candy section. She grabbed a KitKat bar and went over to the front counter. "Two ninety-three." the girl and the front counter said in a high pitched voice. Eliza payed and went outside to her car. She went inside and began to drive home.
How is it? Im new so im wondering.
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realy good.It could do with some more detail to her surroundings.by the front counter do you mean cash register.this could realy turn into a good story.keep it up
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Thanks so much!
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