From Loneliness

In his prison of the mind1

The bird sat2

And watched the world through a window3


The window showed the bird4

All the things the bird wanted5

But the bird was too afraid to fly6


On the outside dangers lurked7

But the bird never knew8

That on the inside it would die9


From loneliness.

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So ... I guess I do poetry now?

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  • Violette silver member
    October 7

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    Hmmm i think the from loneliness like sorta goes whtout saying and i think having it there also disrupts the flow


  • Ata Van Halen silver member
    October 7

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    hmmm...

    This is very intriguing... You should add more too it.


  • Lies4Truth
    October 6

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    Your great at it so do please continue if you do poetry now do you think you will start reading/ commenting poetry? just an errant thought Its very beautiful and a feeling i feel farmiliar with and i think i have written about myself Great of couse


    • Dark Legend
      October 6
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      I KNEW you´d ask that I honestly don´t know.

      but thanks for the review.

      • Lies4Truth
        October 6
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        Lol you should i would love to get your imput on alot of stuff either way your choice. Never a problem you know that


  • Little Lilly Angel
    October 6

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    Yess!!! You do poetry!!!
    but such a sweet bird, i want to hug it and make it live with me, then it will not die of loneliness Poor birdy,but great poem!!


    • Dark Legend
      October 6
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      Yes. I know. I feel for that birdy too

      but thanks for reviewing.

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