Drip

Drip,
   Drip,
      Drip.
1

I was cold,
shivering,
this place was unfamiliar.
My fingers and arms were
stretched, but something
bound my wrists. Something
metallic. Something colder
than the temperature of the room.2

         Drip,
            Drip,
               Drip.
3

My eyes closed,
heavy,
Dare I open them to see?
I did. Darkness was everywhere,
It engulfed everything. All I saw
was a single light,
an orange, dim, unpromising,
flickering light on the far wall,
illuminating the nothingness.4

                  Drip,
                     Drip,
                        Drip.
5

I tried to smell,
but my nose was plugged.
I was breathing through my mouth,
but although every sense
urged me to scream,
I couldn't. My throat was paralyzed.
My diaphragm felt contracted.
And the strength in my arms was
fleeing, as I tried to pull free.6

                           Drip,
                              Drip,
                                 Drip.
7

The light flickered,
buzzed, and burnt out. For
a second, I thought it was a good
thing. The light meant that I was safe
from the eyes of whoever
had brought me here. But another light,
a brighter light,
suddenly sprang into existence,
and I saw evil's face.8

                                    Drip,
                                       Drip,
                                          Drip.
9

He was man,
or less than. He wore gloves,
but not white gloves. They were darker
than the darkness that had only just
been my companion. I tried to ask
'why?'
but could not make a sound. Instead,
I just appeared to be struggling.
He pulled out a syringe,
the needle staring me in the eye,
"Sleep,"
he said through his familiar jaw,
and I did.10

                                             Drip,
                                                Drip,
                                                   Drip,
                                                      Drip,
                                                         Drip.
                                                            Drip.
                                                               Drip.
11

I awoke,
this time in
excruciating
pain.
Worse than
death,
worse than
suffering.
I was
experiencing
both.12

The demon was back,
he rubbed my arm,
held my hand.13

                                                                   Drip,
                                                                      Drip,
                                                                         Drip.14

My blood was running low,
almost gone,
dripping between every thought.
Still all I could think was 'why?'
'why now?'
'why me?'
'why the fuck
are you doing this to me Dad?'15

Author notes

Just another urge to write something kind of twisted :/

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  • seasonsoflove
    October 14
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    Wow. Twisted is an understatement here. haha
    Great one though. Excellent work yet again, Kevan.

  • Haha pretty twisted, Kevan. At first I though it was waterboarding or something, but as it went on it just kept getting weirder and weirder and them BAM!! It's lil old Daddy. That was messed up.


  • Reaver Greeters member
    October 5

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    'Binded' should be 'bound' and i think seep should be sleep? Not sure with that one...don't know if you meant him to say seep.

    excrutiating should be excruciating

    Not really sure if you care about the grammar stuff, just wanted to point it out.

    I was actually kind of shocked by this in the end. I had no idea it was the poor guys Father being so evil.

    I loved the way you structured it too. It seemed to add suspense to the whole thing.

    You're right. Very twisted. Very dark. I was left wondering though...did he die?

    Great write!

    Rian

    beginning: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 4.

  • Marta gold member
    October 5

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    Delightfully twisted, sounds like a date I once had. He was the real drip though, I'm not much into bondage either.

    Good work here, I like the way this read and find nothing wrong with it. The words flowed wonderful and painted a good picture of what was going on.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.