The Ghost of an Unkissed Kiss

"I want to touch you so bad," he told her.1

"Then do it!" she yelled.2

"I can't," he whispered, looking down.3

"Don't you love me?" she asked, searching his eyes.4

"Yes! More than anything...but there's so many secrets I've kept from you...so many things I should tell you."5

"Then tell me." she pleaded.6

"If I did you might not love me anymore." he said.7

"That couldn't happen." she replied.8

There was a long silence.9

He sighed.10

"It's too late, Elizabeth. It's all too late."11

"No, its never too late." she said.12

"The day I met you...," he paused,"I should have never let this happen."13

Her eyes filled with tears,"So you regret everything?"14

He looked at her, "No! Its just...you...deserve things I cant give you."15

She reached for his hand, he pulled it away.16

"All I ask of you is your touch." she told him.17

He turned from her.18

"And that is the only thing I can't give to you Elizabeth."19

She stood up. "Why! Why can't you!? Its not like your going to die  if we touch! I just want to be held by you, kiss you, just...touch...you."20

"I want that more than anything," he told her, "And you know that."21

"Just tell me why you can't...and I'll never ask of you again." she said.22

"Promise...promise me you will not love me any less?"23

"Of course," she replied,"I love you. Nothing will change it."24

There was a long cold silence.25

"I'm dead," he whispered.26

"I'm dead too!" she yelled, "You're killing me!"27

He shook his head. Then he looked in her eyes and said,28

"No, I'm a ghost, Elizabeth."29

She screamed and backed away from him.30

Then she fumbled for the door and ran out onto the balcony.31

She looked out into the cold night, tears streaming down her face.32

"A ghost?" she thought,"How did I fall in love with something that isn't real?" She shook her head.33

"I am real." she heard him say.34

Then she felt a chilling push from behind. She screamed and lost her footing. She grabbed the railing, but it broke sending her plunging towards the steel gate below. It pierced her body and she went limp.35

The next thing she heard was,"Hello, Elizabeth."36

She turned to see him standing there.37

She smiled and took his hand, and she was happy.38

She'd rather be dead and be with him, then live without him.39

<340

Author notes

This is part symbolistic for things in my life part story. So yeah. And it kind of reminds me of (Don't Fear) The Reaper...a great love song.

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  • Kristen Corpse
    October 26, 2005
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    Nice Blakely...definitely wasn't expecting that from the title...Nicely done


  • Shadow Recon
    October 23, 2005
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    omg Blakely this is beautiful.....I love you so much..


  • anastazsia
    October 23, 2005
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    Good idea. Your simple prose is interesting, but the last part seemed a bit too sparse - maybe you could try adding just a teeny wee bit of description? I think that'd spice up the story.

  • General Calvin
    October 22, 2005
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    awwww this is very sweet. you put alot of effert into this. good job

  • Joao Camilo
    October 22, 2005
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    Vamphore, You certainly have good ideas.

  • Trial and Error
    October 21, 2005
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    Ooooo beautiful Cit, great jobs, you get a clappy!


  • blue128eyedkk
    October 21, 2005
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    WOW! I thought this really happened. Great Job! it kept me guesing. Keep up the great work. Check out some of my writes?

    -karen

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