Just fifteen (lyrics/poem)

I'm fifteen and I have made it this far
I hate this life I live, it's just to much
Everyday I wanna wear that smile
That's just not fake1

Why am I so invisible in this life?
Sitting hear fighting the tears in my eyes
Wondering what it feels like to be loved
Only my dreams can tell me that2

I don't wanna be the loser
I wanna breathe and believe I can do it
I don't wanna be the laugh of the group
I wanna be the one they all look up at3

I'm just a loser and I know that I am
I'm a freak, jusk ask the kids on the street
Why can't I just do anything right
In this stuffed up life4

I think I need to change who I am
Then maybe someone will notice me
I wanna wake up and feel the rain
That will wash this pain away5

I don't wanna be the loser
I wanna breathe and believe I can do it
I don't wanna be the laugh of the group
I wanna be the one they all look up at6

I am fifteen and have made it this far
Tears in my eyes every day and night
Hope just fading out of my life
I just don't believe I can do it7

I don't think I can change
With one jump it was all over
At only fifteen I was laid to rest
I was just and invisible, unloved child

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  • WindSongNauck
    October 5

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    WindSongs thoughts

    Miss;

    I will have to think about this one before I write any if at all changes you ask for.

    I will leave you with this life is a path of learning what the word faith means to understand what your mind can not understand at a given point in your life of question about life time through growth brings you to reflection and that reflection brings to you the wisdom you did not have before! The faith to make it is understood.

    the age old question of a child "Why"? and Gods best answer Wait! an the wisdom will come!

    Prayer is the key to the door Way of All Wisdom

    Celtic Woman - the Voice

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 2

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    This was really moving and very enjoyable too read. I would have too say that this is my favorite part:

    I don't wanna be the loser
    I wanna breathe and believe I can do it
    I don't wanna be the laugh of the group
    I wanna be the one they all look up at6

    But overall this was great. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest!


  • SCREAMxTOxxBExHEARD
    October 1

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    I liked this. It was good. I don't think you need to improve or revise it at all. It was a great write.


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 1

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    This was really good. Very nicely written. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for entering and good luck to you in the contest.


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    September 30
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    That was great. could use some revising-ishy but awesome! You finally posted something new!


  • RedHearts
    September 30

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    This is a very sad poem.. I guess every one reading this knows this, so no point telling this. I like it, it is something I felt in my teenage years... Great write.

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