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Love Is Blind2
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Every Thursday, and Sunday I come here to Moe's to eat.4
No, I lie. 5
I come to Moe's for her.6
Jenny.7
I have fallen in love. 8
I would love to describe her, but sadly, I am blind.9
I can describe her laugh, touch, and scent. 10
She always smelled of Channel, and under it vaguely,11
baby powder.12
Her laugh was angelic. Her touch feathery.13
We always ate together, and parted saying, "Till later."14
Monday, a new nurse is starting today.15
When I answer the door I hear, "It's you!"16
And the scent of Channel and baby powder drown my senses.17
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Author notes
I decided to write this from a mans perspective. Hope it is ok.
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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That is so beautiful and sweet!!!
beginning: 4.
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And what an aroma it is
Thanks hun. Muahhhhh
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Billie we both know the smell of a beautiful woman when we smell it lol. You don't need a mans perspective to explain this. I have met such woman, the ones that have made me blind. I love this write you always write so well..
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Thank you so much Jenn. I adored this challenge, and a few of whome I compete with. LOL. Thanks again hun.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Ah yes, I too am a huge sucker for romance. That is about all I write. I am glad you enjoyed this. A wonderful contest you have. Thank you for a great comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
I hope you have more stories on your page because I'll certainly read them. I don't want to sound repetitive, then I'll just say that this one is among of my favourites for all the reasons and specially because I'm a sucker for romance
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Oh my goodness! That's so beautiful ♥!
I love this, it was so powerful...and it being short I think packed it with more punch, like WHOA-AH!
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Thank you. I made an attempt
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Paul,
Thank you for the kind and wonderful comment. I do appreciate it very much.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
sensual, sensitive, soft, seraphic... beautiful...
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What a wonderfully touching story this one is. One of those things that you think can't possibly happen, but everyone has an instance of it happening to them or a friend. A very soft and dreamy atmosphere created for this one. Somehow so gentle. Thanks for sharing.
Paul -
Thank you hun. I actually penned three for this contest. The first one was sad, so had to end on a soft note. Thanks so much hun.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
this is so beautiful and touching.
sweet and sad because the man cant see.
i love the ending! a happy ending, yay!
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This is great, soft and touching written Billie. This lines and feelings reminds me on my own scents lol. Is there anybody who want to write something like this for me? lol
~Sonja~ -
This is so cute! It gave me one of those giddy, "Awwwww" moments after I read it. It's really charming and incredibly sweet. I like it alot!
Kyota Miller~ -
Thank you Elba for such kind words. This was for a contest on 100 word writes. I penned three. LOL. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Beautifully Penned!
A delicate write this is Serenity... it is beautiful as well as romantic in some kind of way. I love the reading of it. Thank you so much for the magnificent gift of your pen.
~Elba
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LOL...glad it makes you happy and thanks for the kind comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you so much for the fabulous comment. It is appreciated.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
I sure like this. Makes me Happy. Thanks!!
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Good write
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Thanks for the great comment. She was his new nurse because he is blind. LOL. I am glad you enjoyed this write. It was quite a challenge to do in only 100 words.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
I suppose in fiction alls well that ends well. I hope that most know that in life there is more to happily ever after. Thank you for this marvelous comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you so very much for this fabulous comment. Indeed it does make you appreciate what you have.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you for the kind words. Hard to convey sweetness in only 100 words. I am happy I succeeded. Thanks again so much.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you so much Diway for the wonderful comment. The write is purely fiction, and a great challenge to use only 100 words. I also feel it would be great for him to see her just once, but nice also he could love more than her physical beauty. Thanks again.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
This was so sensitively and delicately written! Truly beautiful. I loved the way you emphasized the scents of Chanel and baby powder as symbolizing the feminine mystery to the protagonist of your poem. Lovely, touching piece; a real pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing it.
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No need to applaud. I will definately read yours. I enjoyed penning this, and the challenge was good. Hard to convey emotion in only 100 words. Thank you for the great comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
This is a unique piease as I sure you already know. though this would turn out something like this. but why the nurse? nursing home?
Image and Visions … Dare to dream, and have the courage to do that what others only dream of… Would you mind dropping by my site and commenting on my meager attempts at writing. -
This is a beautiful write on love.Love is blind of a truth but we must not allow emotions to ruin our sense of judgement in
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nice way of putting it
it makes you appreciate what u have
I'm soo going to read more of your poems
keep up the good work
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I really like this... it's well worded, and i love good love poems. this is definately one of them. the feel of it is so sweet... like actually sweet.
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I read this poem and I feel , sort of sad, for I think if only you could see her once... my heart goes out to you... goood work
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ok? Better than ok. This is great! I love it. wonderful write. I'll read some more of yours! For sure. Maybe i'll come back tomorrow and applaud it... I've used all of my applaus, and i am saving up to do some contests...
Oh, and i have a poem that is in a contest judged on popularity... The one with the most applause wins... So i would REALLY appreciate it if you would check it out! Here's the link allpoetry.com/poem/1581494 thanks so much!
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