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Upon A Star 2
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I sat outside, crying, looking at the sky. 4
I felt so awful, so angry. 5
How could anyone do such terrible things to my child without me knowing? 6
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That's when I saw it, racing across the night sky. 8
A shooting star! 9
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I closed my eyes tight and made a wish, then went in to kiss my daughter goodnight. 11
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Two days later, I retrieved the Sunday Times from the driveway. 13
The headline read... 14
"Meteor falls on home of local man accused of molestation."15
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I smiled as I closed the paper, then took my daughter to the park. 17
Some wishes do come true.18
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Author notes
My first write was a bit sad, this one is to counter that effect a bit 
What did you think? Please comment!
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Great!
Hey Billie! Sorry my comments have been remiss lately, you know how it is, and I am catching up now and then. I am glad I decided to do this one first.
My first reaction was TOUCHE! I loved this and love poetic justice so much. It is the one time when all feels right with the world. You told such a well packed, complete with great punch, story...and in the right amount of words! Very impactful! Now it is just I who needs to learn how to say it all in shorter words!
(Imagine me that way, NOT!
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It had that slight morbid edge to it, just enough to give it spice. I can only say I am so glad this did not happen to you.
I do wish the justice were more real in this world though.
I do not think Jiminy Cricket intended it this way, boy would he be blown away? hahaha
Well put and effective! I like it. Well written as always for you hon.
Blessings and luv ya, ~Kitty {{{{
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It is indeed sad that so many "takers" walk free, while so many "givers" are in prisons of fear. Too bad not all wishes come true. Thank you for another wonderful comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
All the right wishes should always come true!
And I wish it was so simple to give some people what they really deserve, instead we have to watch how they walk free
This is again a very good story and I'm sure that many people would be more than happy to make a wish to that same star
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Yes, I agree with you.
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Indeed not all should come true, but a few need to happen. Thanks so much Sonja.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Oh, Billie... I hope that all peoples wishes will never come true because this world will not egsist... This story is very nice and sweet. It is very hard to say everything only with hunders words, but you did it great, from the deepest part of your heart, full of emotions.
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Thank you so much! I do hope it never does happen, but if it does perhaps a meteor will strike down the beast. Thank you so much for the very kind words.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Andrew,
Thank you for yet another kind comment. I will not say there are biblical concepts here, at least not intentionally, but what you sow is what you reap is indeed a great credo in life. Something we would all be wise to remember.
By the way, your authors quote, "Life is not a bed of roses", I must say is some times wrong. It is, and full of pricks. LOL. Male and female of course.
Thanks again for another kind comment.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Excellent Write
The work was is great Serenity... I loved the wish too... HA! I like the way you write your stories... short but to the point. Good word. Thank you for the gift of your pen.
~Elba
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Wow. Wow. I am left a little speechless. If something like that ever DID happen...you tell a story well, and capture attention with the brevity of it...not the write itself, but the way in which you write it. You can tell a story simply as it is and make it make sense. And picturesque. I hope you got something for this poem!
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i really like this poem also
i think i understand the story behind it and for what i get it's cool
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This is another beautiful poem that goes with great word flow to direct the reader to the reality of the biblical concept of sowing and reaping.Whatsoever a man sows that he shall reap.
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Thank you yet again for such a fabulous comment. I attempt to be unique, and sometimes succeed. Thanks again.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Now I know it was good for another soul besides my own. Your comment does my heart good. Though this is fiction, I think were it to really happen a lot of stars would die in the process. But so many already have. Thank you for such powerful words.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you. Thank you from the very depths of the very bottom of my heart. I cannot express the depths to which this poem spoke to me. P'raps someday a metaphorical meteor will fall upon the one who hurt me in a similar way. Your poem was a forceful, much needed catharsis for me, and I simply cannot thank you enough for writing it. You've aided in the healing of a wound that has been festering for years, and I shall forever bless you for it.
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OMG, what a thing to say, but in the end effect you're and I am with you, but gee girl your style is unique.
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Thank you for such kind words. I am happy to say this is purely fiction. I penned it for a 100 word contest. I enjoyed the challenge, and am glad you enjoyed the write. Indeed the scum got what he deserved.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you for the fabulous comment. No, this did not happen to any of my children thankfully. I penned it just a bit ago for a contest for 100 word writes. I am glad you enjoyed it, and yes he did get what he deserved.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
You poem is really good, and I hope it never happened. But I will tell you, the man really got what he deserved
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Oh WOW I can't believe no one has commented on this is. It's a very good poem, I hope this didn't really happen to your child. If it did they pervert got what he deserved. This is just an all around cool poem. I love the part about the prayer and then the meteor crashing down on the pervert. Very nice work
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