"Hey Sara! Let's have some fun with him!" exclaimed Taylor.1
"What kind of fun?" I nervously asked.2
"Let's mess around with each other for him." 3
"Umm... Sure... That sounds like it could be fun."4
This was the official beginning of the adventures to come. I mean we had been working towards this point for a month or so but this is when it really began. 5
OK some background info 6
We have been friends for about five years. The guy (Lee) in the story was my boyfriend at one time but now he's Taylor's fiancee. The three of us had been kind of messing around together (like him screwing both of us with toys at the same time) but Taylor and I NEVER did anything with each other but hold hands. Well now we decided to take it further (after a long night of discussing what each other would be ok with).7
We both went the whole day and could not stop thinking about our plans for that night. So when that night got there, we were both so hot and ready for it. 8
We started by kissing of course. That was great. I now know why girls say girls are more passionate. Within the next few minutes we were making out. Lee was watching this with wide eyes. 9
All of a sudden he butt in and said he wanted to make love to Taylor while she and I were making out. Well much to Taylor's surprise Lee and I had this part planned. They started making love and hearing her moan, I slid my hand down Taylor's body and found her clitoris. I started rubbing it as I would my own. She started going crazy and moaning even more. By this time I was so hott, I wanted some! He reached his hands down and started fingering me. All that could be heard was moaning and the sounds of skin against skin. He stopped screwing her and got the toys out. The only difference was that this time, Taylor and I were sucking on each other's tits (mine are much bigger than hers but it doesn't matter). Finally we were all tired out so we decided to go to sleep. 10
Well the next day, we thought about it all day again and by that afternoon we were ready to have female sex by ourselves. That was even better. We learned each other's body's like they were our own. Now every chance we get, we cannot keep our hands off each other. Our afternoons are spent sucking, fingering, dildoing, and kissing. It is perfect!11
Author notes
Ok everyone... First of all I know this story is not that great but it's the first erotica story I've written so please give me pointers. Second of all don't worry it's NOT a true story... just something I came up with... Don't ask... LOL...
What did you think? Please comment!
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LOL... Thanks for your comment!!! I'm going to work on writing more detailed ones sometime!!!
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Not bad for your first time. Be a little more descripitive next time around. It felt like you were having a conversation with someone rather than telling I story. I still need to take a cold shower and wait for my boyfriend to come home.
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not bad, not bad. but try taking it a little slower. it felt kinda rushed. take ure time. theres an art to this kind of thing, just like with poetry and painting. for a first-time writer, tho, very nice. -
Well well! No more angel anymore! Its going to have to be sexyangel from now on!
This was really good for your first time Beth! I am very impressed! Way to go!
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... I kinda figured it would take you by surprise... That's why I warned ppl in the brief...
Hugs,
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Congratulations on your first story. You did a really good job, although I must say, it took me by surprise. You write stories very well, Sweetie. Hugs, Gramma ♥
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wow wicked! this is crazy sweetie but brilliant none the less, you're first one huh? its a good write, well done and best of luck in the contest! l8az love ya sky xxxx
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I have to give you kudos for just writing a story to begin with, first of all. Storywriting is not for everyone but you really did very well and you mastered dialoque, which believe it or not, a lot of people struggle with. So right there you get points sweetie. Also, to write a story about something you have no actual experience in or with... which basically means you wrote about something totally foreign to you... that again is quite a challenge to overcome. I agree with Jess that it could use more sex and definitely more descriptive foreplay. Foreplay plays a big part in erotica. But I do have to say that overall here... you did a good job for a first timer especially. Thank you for entering our contest and good luck!
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I thought this was a great first try I find it sooooooo hard to write erotica and ppl that have been doing a long time forget what they were like at first Is like sex the first time its all over a bit quick but keep going it gets better the more you practice
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Well, you don't need the background info... if it's just a story! I used it to find out if Taylor was a guy or girl at first! So it was a nice engagement present for Lee, I see! But now you can't keep your hands of Taylor!
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Well, Beth, this probably could use some more detail and basically some more sex in it, but other than that, it's a great start for an erotic piece. Just try and get yourself hot as you are writing it; if you can do that, it's a great erotic piece. I think that you could probably evolve it into something of this sort:
"They started making love, slowly at first, her teeth bitting down on my bottom lip. As the speed quickened, my hands slid down Taylor's body and found her clitoris..." That sort of detail makes a story great. Don't be shy; just let it all out there!
Hugs
Mama Jess
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