She Wants Revenge

She Wants Revenge
Lady in black, hides the plan in her dress
It’s clean cut – no mess, all hairspray and lies
No surprise, her morals are all in the blade
One more reddened shade for the lips of this girl
Betrayed by the boy, this lady in black
One stab in the back, he’ll die tonight
Pay for what’s right, the good to avenge
Because she wants revenge – she’ll kill for it, too
A high-heeled shoe, no doubt; he’ll chase her
The night’ll be a blur, all hairspray and lies
Big surprise for the boy, none for me
Happy and smiling she’ll be, scummy boy
Tossed out like a toy, imagine her joy
The death of that boy, her attack
She’s the lady in black with her plan down her dress
It’s clean cut – no mess, I’m the lady in white
I’ll watch them tonight, high-heeled shoe
Nothing new, her intention’s disguise
Knives strapped to her thighs, lips smile
Gone awhile, she’ll come back later
Better, greater – he never will
For her kill, the good to avenge
Because she wants revenge - she'll kill for it, too,
And I’ll be
Right
Beside
Her.

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  • idajellybean
    September 28

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    Tres bien

    This. WHUZ. AMAZING!! *jaw drops* I loved the imagery and the prose, the way you worded it was nice and I can imagine black silk and red dripping lips (<--wtc) when I read that. Electra all over again, this time in black satin.. muhahaha! Also love the undertone of girl power--aka dont break up with us..wait till we do it first. Your life will be spared. Hahah!


  • Nienna Calmcacil
    September 27

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    LOVE LOVE LOVE

    "HOLY #$)*ing @!&$ on a $*&@ing SANDWHICH"
    ...I think that's what Tristan says. Hmmm.
    Whatever. He expresses it quite nicely.

    However, I do have one question, darling...

    WHY ISN'T THIS ON ALLPOETRY!?
    Why did you put it on StoryWrite?
    Trust me, it'll be much more appreciated there than here.

    Anyway.
    I absolutely love it.
    I definitely read it out loud.
    And I love the line:
    "...her morals are all in the blade/
    One more reddened shade for the lips of this girl"

    Lovely imagery.

    May I ask what the inspiration was?


    • Pretty-Wicked
      October 3
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      Oh, it's on AllPoetry. I posted it there first, but found that I couldn't enter it in this contest because it was on a different site - thus it is also posted here.

      And thanks so much! Another 15min hit XD