Rejected and Dejected

One of these days1

When I 'm to tired to save face2

I will speak my mind 3

And make you all afraid4

This day will come5

Hopefully soon6

You will listen to my words7

You will not swoon8

I'm tired of pleasing people9

Saying all thiose kind words10

What's the point11

When I'm never heard12

Not when it matters13

Or when I really have14

Something to say15

To bad you cant wish it all away16

My words will sting17

And perhaps even burn18

But you are the ones19

To make the first spurn20

What did I do?21

What did I say?22

To have you all behave this way

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  • SocioPathetic...
    September 27

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    this poem flows very well, i love how you wrote it, the technique is awesome. And i agree with what shadow said, what a punch in the face... actually why not make it a kick? be who you are, don't give a damn about anyone.


  • Shadow-Kissed
    September 25

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    Wow. That poem just punches the reader in the face, amazing. Caught a few typos, but nothing major. Well done.
    Oh, and if you are having trouble being nice...don't be. Eventually everyone will just roll with the punches. After all, the world needs some drama.


  • SAVAGEshark.
    September 25

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    This is an angry one.An angry narrator,dissapointed and at last true to his character,and of course a little puzzled with the world.


  • Vanessa Wolfe
    September 25

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    this is a great poem you have here. so much emotion. sounds like a poem i would right. i know the feeling of never being heard, its hard to keep up the nice girl act sometimes, i know.

    excellent job.


  • Runkai
    September 24
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    i like it

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