Goosed

(when your reading this story T.P. is the dog talking)1

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  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    September 23

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    A story told from the point of view of a dog? Interesting. Could use some work with grammar, though.

    Comma after day. Capitalize your I's. Make a space between a period and the next sentence. Comma after Suddenly.
    Accidentally <-- that's the correct spelling. everyone (not 'everybody'). I'd suggest rephrasing that sentence also to read more like: I accidentally woke everyone up.

    Interesting start here- I look forward to seeing where you go with this idea.

    Pixie