Not Fin.!

Camp Westwind was so much fun. Thats how I met most of my frinds and thats where I met Brad. We had a gift giving saramony, which is sort of like secret santa and at the end of it I just happend to be the one Brad picked. When he gave it to me he said, "Cassy, I don't know you very well but hopefully after today I will get to know you and I just hope we can hang out some time." The next day I went over to my friend Alex. "Okay I have a serious problem. I'm starting to like Brad."1

"Brad!! Well he is cute but still he is such a jock!," said Alex. 2

"Really? but he seems so sweet!!" I replied.3

"Yeah well didn't your mom ever tell you not to judge a book by it's cover?"4

"Yeah yeah yeah what ever." After that conversation I went up to my cabin to change my shoes. When I came back I saw Alex running up to me, glancing over her shoulder several times. "Alex," I laughed, "Whats so urgent?"5

"He likes you too!!!!!"6

"Who likes who now whuh?" I asked confused by that statement. 7

"Brad likes you Cassy!"8

"REALLY?! How did you find this out?"9

"We were in a group and we were talking about who we liked. When you were walking up the hill he pointed to you!!"10

"That's great! But I'm not going to make my move any time soon. I promised myself I would take it slow this year."11

"Well you should still talk to him."12

"I will eventually." After that we were called in the main lodge for a meeting. I sat by a girl named Mina. We were told the plans for right after the meeting which was lunch and then free time. At lucnh I sat with Alex.13

"Hello?! Earth to Cassy!" Alex said, waving her hand in front of my face.14

"Oh sorry," I said, snapping back to reality. 15

"Who were you staring at?"16

"Brad," I said with a grin.17

"Brad? but he's over there," She said pointing in the other direction. I looked over there and noticed the other brad eating with his friends. 18

"Oh no."19

"What? What happened?"20

"That isn't the Brad I was talking about. That one is," I pointed to the other Brad that I actually liked.

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  • alyssa103
    October 5
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    good job

    well a few mistakes but awesome job

    beginning: 2, language: 4, plot: 1, ending: 3, dialog: 5, characters: 2.


  • RazorbladeKiss14
    September 23

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    wow great job! I really like this!!! I wonder who the other brad is!? Does he look like brad or is he handsomer! Or are they twins! And one is good and the other is evil! It's killing me I have to know lol Great job. Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!! *throws you some cookies*


  • Trendster
    September 23
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    he he..quite close to a Love Triangle comedy. I liked the ending.