The autumn breeze was what one might call that unique shade of mid-November cold, the lance corporal's velvet-brown eyes capturing the very color of the day even as he held the barrel of his sidearm up to his platoon leader's head.
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Love it love it love it love it love it!
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Okay, gotta say I love yor vivid descriptions at the beginning of the sentence. Then at the end, I was all pumped up for a good action scene.
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
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Hook, line, and Beretta M92? I like it.
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My brother is a lance corporal... Haha. But yeah, good hook. =]
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