Anna-Marie stole one last glance at the boy chained up in a corner, his eyes full of sorrow and regret, and promised that she would do whatever it takes to help people like this: to help people who needed a warrior.
A contest entry
- Hook Me In A Sentence by CallMeWhenUrRich.
1210 points, ended November 15, 72 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
made this up on the spot. i guess that was kind of the point, but still.
Comments
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This is definitely my type of story! It sounds so intriguing and full of adventure and trials. Awesome sentence, I'm already hooked
-Masq -
Ah, this is a good sentence and definitely in the running for the prizes. It sounds to me of a fantasy-like story. You made it sound very realistic, and I could sense the misery and the hope in it.
Thanks for entering and good luck!!!
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Takes should be took, since the rest of your sentence is past tense. Other than that, it's a great hook! You've got two characters, a setting with despair and determination, implying there's some evil, near or far, that needs killing.
Great setup!
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strong ,intrestng and wonderful line ....there is a curiosity about what kind of story it would be if anyone try to write around it ...i wanna read it . well done and good luck
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