Tears blinded her as she lay there against the cooling asphalt of the highway. "Com'on," she pleaded. Miranda's friends sat in her car unable to see her in the dark. They could almost see her form in the road as the emergency lights flashed. Whitney rolled down the window allowing the cold air to rush into the dead car. "Get outta the middle of the road," Whitney demanded as two lights came closer. Miranda laid there, tears still stinging her cheeks. "Don't be stupid, get outta the road!" Andrew shouted. She wasn't showing any signs of movement. They grew nervous watching from the lifeless car. Whitney screamed as the truck rushed past.1
Author notes
I didn't get hit, I'm still here... this really happened. I got depressed and laid down in the middle of the highway one night and sprawled out and said, God, send a semi. It was a bad night
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Miranda if you da that again and die I will never talk to you again. The story was very good and great details. Luv ya gurly!
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I'm already scared to step out of a car to change a tire on the highway, leave alone to lay down on the road.
Your story is well told and I hope you no longer feel like challenging trucks
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Oh wow, scary stuff. Please don't try it again
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I've actually done it one more time since then, but last time it was too close so I don't think I'll be doin it again. The main reason I did it was because of how terrible my night was going. There's a whole big story behind how my car died, lets just say there was a fire and part of a windshield and a rearview mirror involved. Anyway, thank you so much for reading my story, have an awesome day.
-Miranda
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I will agree with Sir Yem!!
Do not ever ever do that again!
What an incredibly intense moment you have described here. you have taken us to holding our breath in very few words.
Really quite incredible!
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The first time I've been on in, how long, I don't remember. But its been a while. Not sure how we fell out of contact, but this writing is hauntingly pure. The words paint such a vivid picture. I could see the scene clear. I am utterly impressed with the dialect. Ok, so this is a real critique. I just came from theatre where I was critiquing others monologues. So shoot me. Still, though, you need some sunshine in your life. So do something creative and whatnot. Maybe make a dress or something. And of course I am a good option. Just don't look for me on MSN, my home computer's busted and I have to use the school's. Talk to ya later. Oh, and of course, a beautiful piece.
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You did that? Egads, don't do it again! Yem has spken!
Take a look at your text, there has been some monkey business going on. It happens when you transfer from some word processors to here I think.
So remember I've decreedthat you shall never do anything silly like this again!
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