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The letter2
My dear friend, I sail on the morning tide. 3
There is no way of knowing when my next letter will reach you but be assured it shall. My heart goes out to you my friend knowing full well that you are now condemned to live life in a world of darkness, with the pain of never again being able to see the beauty of a fast Cutter, her sails starkly white against the early morning sunrise as she races across the wide expanse of ocean. 4
Or watch an Albatross glide gracefully across the great southern seas on outstretched wings; or the sight of white horses as they race towards the Cape of Good Hope. 5
Never again will you laugh with excitement at the sight of dolphins racing alongside sleek hulls a smile on their faces. Knowing that at any time they could outstrip them for speed leaving them alone on the vast ocean6
Rest awhile from your torment dear friend, reach out to me with every fibre of your being, listen and I will send to you sights and sounds that were once so familiar to you. 7
Picture in your mind's eye a new moon hanging in the night sky like a golden lantern, surrounded on all sides by countless stars, shining like diamonds placed on a black velvet cushion.8
Listen while I convey to you the sound of the wind sighing high in the rigging, and describe to you, the evening breeze heavy laden with perfume gathered from the enchanted forest just beyond the horizon. Listen as she whispers of the places she been to and where she is going.9
Look inward my friend and see once more the great deserts with sand dunes like piles of gold dust, under the hot dessert sun. Picture yourself once more running on a tropical beach pursuing dusky maidens laughing like children in their naked innocence.10
Your blindness cannot rob you dear friend of things seen in the days when two eyes of china blue looked with wonder on the beauties of creation. These memories will always remain, lighting up the darkness in which you now find yourself, clear and bright to be recalled at will in the minds eye.11
A contest entry
- Letters! by Melancholic Smile.
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Comments
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It was certainly very dramatic and exploding with imagery - which may seem a little over the top - but then again you are talking about someone who has lost their sight and what is better than being able to paint a scene in someone's mind if they cannot see it for themselves?
One of my closest friends is visually impaired and I describe things to him in detail all the time, so this struck a chord. It was very moving and the only think I would have liked to have seen different would maybe have been a few sentences on a more personal, and less descriptive level. Great job though - thanks for entering


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Very poetic. It flows nicely and I can tell that you really put effort into it.
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This is probably a little "overwritten" compared to a real letter but it is pretty well done nonetheless.
Some very moving imagery.
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Thanks kingmaker, will look into it.
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