"No! He jumped!" One man yelled.1
"Call the police!" Another man yelled.2
"Call an ambulance! The firestation!" One woman yelled frantically.3
"NO STOP THE NOISE! STOP THAT NOISE. SHUT THE SOUND OFF!" Drake yelled. He staggered into an alleyway. 4
"Drake! Wha- What's wrong?" Rain studdered. Sirens blared in the background. Paramedics were saying 'he's not going to make it.' People were scrabbling, trying not to get ran over by the ambulance. Police were shouting at people to get out of the way. Drake held his hands up to his ears tightly, and knelt down. Drake leaned against the alleyway, holding his neck, he was gasping for air. He pounded the wall in frustration. He collapsed and now is on the ground in fetal position. Rain knelt down next to him.5
"No! DRAKE, WHAT'S WRONG?" Rain yelled, "HELP! SOMEONE HELP!" But everybody else was too busy with the suicide situation to hear her. He grabbed her wrist. Rain managed to gasp out the word ow. 6
"Drake! Let go of me. I need to get help!" But Drake wouldn't let go. Rain could hear the health instructor saying "Breathe into the victim at a regular rhythm." But her mind just wouldn't grasp the idea. Finally she bent down and matched her lips with his. She breathed in and out deeply, hoping that Drake'll just spring to life suddenly. She came up for breath and immediately went back to saving his life. She thought, "Oh, God, Allah, Jesus, Buddha, whatever's out there... Please give me strength. He can't die. He just can't. Please don't kill him...." Her tears slipped down her face. 7
"His lips... they're so cold..." she thought, "I can't just sit here and cry, I have to save him." His arm was still grabbing on to her wrist. With her other hand, she cupped his chin, and breahted in. Her tears ran off her nose, and down Drake's cheek. 8
"Drake, please, open your eyes, remember how to breathe... Breathe, Drake." With sudden strength, Rain breahted deeply into Drake. His eyes shot open, and he started to cough. Rain's tears turned into tears of joy. 9
"Are you all right?" Rain asked.10
"Man... That was close... I'm sorry..." Drake said. He held his head in his hands. He looked so scared.11
"Are you okay? Are you sick? Is it your lungs? What's wrong? Go check it out... Go to the hospital, okay?" Rain said very fast.12
"I thought I was better." Drake said in despair.13
"Are you sick?" Rain asked caringly.14
"It's my nerves, it's a psychological thing," He said. The police were still yelling in the background, 'Get out of the way! Get out of the way!' 15
"Let's go... Come on." Drake stood up. But Rain couldn't.16
"What's wrong, Rain?"17
"My legs... I was so scared. I thought you were going to die. I was so scared," a tear slid out of her eye, "You stopped moving, and got colder and colder, I thought you were going to die like my father... I was scared..."18
Drake bent down and held Rain in his arms, "I'm sorry... I'm so sorry..."19
"I'm okay now. Trust me." Drake said assuringly.20
"Are you going to be at school tomorrow?" Rain asked.21
"Yeah."22
"Really?"23
"Yes." 24
"You promise?"25
"I promise," Drake said.26
They both started to walk away, but stopped.27
"Drake, I'll watch you go. Today, I'll watch." Rain said.28
"I'm not a little kid."29
"Let me watch you go. I want to watch until you get to the corner."30
"Don't be all weird." Drake said with a smile.31
"I know... it seems like you'll just disappear if I don't watch you."32
"I'm not going anywhere, trust me."33
"I know... I know... but... but..." Rain studdered. Drake held her in an embrace. Rain's chest hurt, the kind of hurt that hurt at the bottom of her neck. The kind of hurt that wasn't from hitting, or bruising of the physical form... The kind that hurt the most. Drake cupped Rain's face with his hands and kissed Rain. Rain jerked her mouth away.34
"Oh... It's your frist time..." Drake said. Rain just nodded.35
"Sorry..." Drake said.36
"No. I was just surprised... It was different. Kisses are so warm..." 37
"Of course kisses are warm. There's no such thing as a cold kiss."38
"But before... Your- Your lips... They, they were so cold..." Rain stampered.39
Drake smiled, "Let me kiss you again, a warm kiss." Rain smiled and melted in his embrace.40
As Rain walked back home, she thought, "He's so warm. Then why am I so nervous? The more I like him, the more I worry, why?"41
Author notes
2 Love.
Story time once again by me
Basically I took a part of a book that was all pictures, and turned it into a story... Not very original, I know. And I know some of you will be able to recognize which manga it came from... but whatever.
Yah.
What did you think? Please comment!
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i dunno. whats am i supposed to say here?
ANGELA!! I KNOW WHAT STORY!! I OWN THE MANGA!! RAHAHAHAHAHA!! RAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! and you know who this is. if you dont, ima gonna hunt you down at school.
*ahem* manga starts with an M and ends with an ARS. lol. and has motorcycles and killing in there. right? lololol. -
Such a beautiful story that you have wrote here. I too did see a few little errors but well, I cant say much as I am crap when it comes to it myself. I am gonna give you 15 points for entering this to my contest. good luck
dawn
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This was an original ideation, a creation from within you, even if you did get the idea or inspiration from pictures... you have created the story... a story behind the images. Well done...
I do have to mention a few things:
A little tweeking on your dialog... it needs a little more "pop" or feeling added.
A few more thoughts from the characters would give more insight to them and thier inner emotions...
Overall well done. Thank you for sharing and keep up the work, my fellow ink slinger... -
I have to join the line of the ignorant as well as I did not recognize this either. I did however think it was a great story and very creatively penned. You have turned this is into a most pleasurable read. You have to love those happy endings! Great job! Good luck in your contest!
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very nice.
I'm not one of your anime/manga dork friends so I haven't the slightest idea what it's from. so yeah! I LOVE YOU! bye.
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Wonderful
Very good story even if you did it from a book. Inspiration is where you find it. You did a great job. -
It was a great story. Though you need to work on your dialoge a little, it was pretty good. Wasn't that much feeling. I would have put in a few lines on thoughts. The idea was excellent though.
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Nope, I don't recognize it.
It must be some crazy shoujo, especially w/ names like "Drake" and "Rain".
Drake leaned against the alleyway, holding his neck, he was gasping for air.
err, replace that last comma w/ a semicolon or some other conjunction. I just prefer a semicolon.
He collapsed and now is on the ground in fetal position.
Perhaps stay in the same tense throughout that paragraph?
Eh, I don't know enough about stories to give constructive criticism... -
This actually is very original.. beautifully written, Thanks so much for sharing your words with all of us here on allpoetry, you have an amazing talent.
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