A Child's Dream1
One night long ago, a child goes reluctantly to bed. He argues that he is old enough to stay up an hour later, yet the parents saw him stifle a yawn before he left the dinner table. His mother is gentle saying that he needs his sleep, and his father while loving is gruff in pointing out that his son is tired and be rest to be up for the full day of school that he has tomorrow.2
The child knows that he cannot argue with both of his parents, so he brushes his teeth, changes into his pajamas and crawls into bed. His mother comes to tuck him in and kiss him on the cheek to wish him sweet dreams. She heads for the door and before she turns off the light, the child is fast asleep.3
The dream begins with his family being in a cloud palace filled with all of the paradise riches that he has read and heard about from the books that his mother has read to him every night for two years. The walls are shiny, the floor is clean, and there is a table full of food, enough to fill the stomachs of ten armies.4
On the North side of the room, are two thrones. One is for the king, which is his father. A noble warrior and kind father. The other throne is for the Queen, who is his mother, a compassion woman and loving mother.5
Outside the sun is bright, and he decides to go and step on the clouds to get a better view of the world from the cloud palace. When the child goes to the edge of the clouds, he looks down below and sees the world. But he slips and falls to the world, to the dark place below. 6
When he lands, the place is murky, dark, and evil. He's surrounded by monsters and all of the evil creatures of the world. Those creatures drag him before the tower of evil to the Queen of the Tower, who rules over these creatures of horror. 7
The place is dirty, infested, and filled with insects and snakes. Moss has grown over the walls and rats infest everywhere they are holes. The Queen is the most hideous of all. Her face is distorted and ugly, barely humanoid in appearance. She represents all of the nightmares and things that the child is afraid of. 8
In the center of the room, is a cauldron boiling and spewing bilge over the floor and walls. The Queen says that the potion is nearly complete and that her beauty will once again return once she has added one final ingredient. Then she turns to the child and points. "You" she says. 9
The child screams. At the child cry, the place is filled with light and the creatures of horror scatter and the Queen is caught in the light and screams in pain and then bursts into flame and ash. 10
The beam of light that descends from the sky carries the father and mother as well as the armies of light. The father asks his son where he has been. The child croaks that he fell from the clouds and fell into the darkness below. The father picks him up and says we are going home, far from this evil place. As the child is taken to the cloud palace, the child wakes to the sound of his mother, waking him for school, to start a bright new day.
Author notes
This was an actual dream that I had when I was 6 or 7... I hope that you enjoy the black and white reference, it's truly shows how kids see things sometimes...
A contest entry
- ALMOST ANYTHING GOES by AlohaDolphinLover.
175 points, ended January 19, 2007, 14 entries
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ohh... thats cool and interesting... and uniquely written,..... well done!
thanks for entering and good luck
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wow this is a very good story...i didn't expect it to end like that but its really awesome....i loved that you had the emotions of the little boy potrayed so well.....caylierose
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THIS WAS WHOA.. so wonderfully written and charged with emotona dn well you really captured the boy's emotions .. which I am at total awe at your feet ... cause babe this was splendid xoxo
Blair xoxox
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This story was quite good. The ending sounds like you could start another chapter to it, because it is not definite,but the beginning is good. It may be hard to choose who will win this contest, because all the stories are good, especailly this one.
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This was a really good story. I love how you have brought ones dream to life and made it seem ever so well. the words and detail that you have used has really brought a picture to my mind. As I was drinking my coffee my eyes was fixed to the story. well done on this write. I shall send you 10 points just for entering this contest
good luck....
Dawn - babyalah -
I can certainly appreciate the fact that you didn't make this all one sided. I think what you have here is more in keeping with the reality of how most of us would dream something like this. You did a wonderful job bringing that out here. Good luck in the contest!
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Very nicely written. I love your word choice and the great description you put into it. Everything seemed to flow smoothly and transition was nice. You do great job at pacing also. Very excellent job with this write so keep up the great work!
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Hm... That's really good. The good and the evil... why wasn't there a king for the darkness of the world? Hm... It's great! You could've elaborated more on the 'heaven' or the light side of the world.
I really like how you ended it. How it's really optimistic and innocent. Yep yep.
Good jobbbbb
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Overall great
I think this is an excellent work. I think it was very realistic in it's good and bad figures.(for probably every child,mom and dad are the "queen" and "king". I really think this is great.
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