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I've offered myself to all the wrong things.
Again and again I feel the same old stings.
Sooner or later I'm going to be left in regret
It's bad enough I already wish I could forget.1

I've come to realize you have been at my side.
Time after time you have come when I've cried.
And I'm beginning to identify your true comfort.
The problem is I've become used to being hurt.2

I know this and yet I continue on and on.
Sometimes I feel like I'm my own little pawn.
The sad part is I know the way out from here.
If I could only accept that your love is sincere.3

Show me I would be right, to let my love for you ignite.
Show me I couldn't go wrong, That my faith can be strong.
Show me I would be right, to let you and my heart unite.
Show me I couldn't go wrong, That I actually do belong.4

And it's all pouring in so fast, and your love is so vast.
If I just let myself go and finally hold on to you alone
Show me I would be right and that I couldn't go wrong.
so could you and my heart unite, so that I may belong?

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  • E Ardania
    September 15

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    You've written a nicely meaningful poem.

    However I think the rhyme scheme doesn't really suit the nature of the poem. At the moment it makes it seem interrupted and not flowy.

    Also, the fourth stanza (line 4) sounds a little abrupt with the multiple rhyming within lines and then within the stanza. You've also placed capital letters in the middle of the sentence.

    Apart from those issues I have nothing else to complain about. Overall, a well-done piece of writing.