Nightmares

She breathes in deep,1

Hopelessly and vulnerably,2

Trapped in her sleep,3

She tries to run,4

From her greatest fear,5

She tries to hide,6

From her nightmare

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Not that great either sorry.

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  • Lullaby.x
    September 21

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    Ah!! I loved this!!! So short and sweet so perfectly written. I don't think you could add anything to this to make it better...other then perhaps a sequal

    ~Lullaby.x


  • Paper.thin.paradox
    September 14

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    Nice but not the best I've read from you.
    It's got a chilling sense but if you continue it I'm sure, it'll give the reader more of the 'nightmare' feel. :]

    Lovely though, as always




    ~Paper.thin.paradox